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Atonement

A branch breaks dried by the sun withers and dies thrown on the fire burning remains sweet pearls silver sparkling a terrible sadness enters the window a willow weeps pitter patter knocking sins came to visit last night blowing against the wind drooping heavy darkness putting right the wrongs was more than one could bare grey clouds rains burning trails of hurt shadows of reality a dream snatched away by judgement scratches on chamber walls weeps the willow entwines in limbs an inescapable embrace in one's own heart a sanctum darkened by wrong's lament mind's rumblings tells tales clouded thoughts chase the wind shadows shifting dark and light reality pays a visit in moon's grey glow seeking soul's atonement for what was done a heavy price reaped for burnt ashes and dusty remains impossible sleep rain's lullaby hush pitter patters against the pane a calming rage gives way to sweet nightmares of relief Written by: Liam McDaid & Kelly Deschler

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Kim Merryman

Date: 7/13/2015 9:04:00 PM

A deep emotional write! Congrats on your win! Love, Kim

Kelly Deschler
Date: 7/20/2015 12:39:00 AM

Thank you for the kind comments and congrats, Kim!

Skat A

Date: 7/13/2015 12:19:00 AM

Kelly, thank you for the support... SKAT

John Posey

Date: 5/26/2015 1:29:00 AM

I see you are still masterfully contributing to the soup..... This collaboration displays the talents of two fine artists.... My heart and soul are always affected by your display of such talent.....Still love ya dearly.... Jake

Kelly Deschler
Date: 5/28/2015 4:42:00 PM

Thank you so much, Jake. Liam is so kind and great to work with... It is good to see you here, as well. Its been almost two years since I joined Poetry Soup and I still love it!

Wilma Neels

Date: 5/15/2015 6:56:00 AM

Kelly, what an awesome collaboration here. A haunting piece indeed :) hugs Wilma

Kelly Deschler
Date: 5/17/2015 10:52:00 PM

Thank you, Wilma. It was a joy to write this poem with Liam. We really appreciate your nice comments. Hugs :)

Dorian Petersen Potter

Date: 5/12/2015 10:42:00 PM

Very beautiful pen Kelly between you and Liam,kind of very sad and dark but well written.A 7+ each!Excellent collaboration!Hope to read more of your poems in the future.Wishing you a very lovely week!In His light!God bless you!:)D.

Kelly Deschler
Date: 5/16/2015 2:01:00 PM

Thank you so much for your kind words, Dorian. It has been a pleasure to write with Liam... My poems may be dark at times, but it depends on my mood when I'm writing. I think it is good to express those feelings instead of letting them linger... I hope this weekend will be a wonderful one for you :)

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 5/12/2015 1:39:00 PM

- A lovely writing from you and Liam, dear Kelly - But, a little sad and dark - Life has both light and dark days .... I know :) - hugs & a 7 - // Anne-Lise :)

Kelly Deschler
Date: 5/16/2015 1:17:00 PM

Thank you, Anne-Lise. It is a joy to write with Liam... Life does have it's dark days and my mood can affect what I write. Even the weather can effect the mood of a poem. I am likely to write something sad on a rainy day, and lighter poems on sunny days :)

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 5/12/2015 8:19:00 AM

What a wonderful collaboration.

Kelly Deschler
Date: 5/14/2015 10:59:00 PM

Thank you, Rick. It is a pleasure to write with Liam.

S.Zaynab Kamoonpuri

Date: 5/11/2015 1:15:00 AM

Deep and soulful and the melancholic portrayals and expressions are penned in a winsome poetic way that leaves me crooning to its tunes. Kudos. Great to read u again.

Kelly Deschler
Date: 5/14/2015 6:32:00 PM

Thank you for taking the time to read and comment on our poem. We appreciate it very much!

Cherl Dunn

Date: 5/11/2015 12:32:00 AM

Dear Kelly What a haunting work here, nicely done and portrayed with such a darkness to it you two would make poe proud to read this one, cheri

Kelly Deschler
Date: 5/13/2015 4:25:00 PM

Thank you so much, dear Cheri. It was a pleasure to write with Liam. We're happy that you enjoyed our poem... I think Poe's "The Tell-Tale Heart" did influence me as I was writing this one :)

Len Gasun

Date: 5/10/2015 7:11:00 AM

This is stunning piece you both shared my dear friends Kelly and Liam. Hugging this write and both of you with a 7. Thank you so much for sharing! love lots always, Leonora

Kelly Deschler
Date: 5/13/2015 2:19:00 PM

Thank you, dear Leonora. We truly appreciate your lovely comments... Sending hugs from both of us!

Constance La France

Date: 5/9/2015 8:31:00 PM

Kelly, beautifully penned, you both did an amazing job with writing this poem 7 and I want to thank you for my awesome win in your Twinkle, Twinkle Little Star Contest, I am honoured

Kelly Deschler
Date: 5/13/2015 12:53:00 AM

You're very welcome. Thank you for being a part of this winner's list... Both Liam and I appreciate your kind comments very much. This poem was a joy to write!

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 5/9/2015 7:29:00 PM

There is great depth that can be enjoyed in the lines of this fine collaboration Kelly and Liam. You make a great writing team! 7

Kelly Deschler
Date: 5/13/2015 12:33:00 AM

Thank you, Connie. It was a pleasure to write with Liam. We're happy that you enjoyed our poem!

Arthur Vaso

Date: 5/7/2015 11:51:00 PM

Liam and Kelly, I have to say. congratulations on this collaboration, the mood is surreal and paints a vivid picture, I loved this poem!!!

Kelly Deschler
Date: 5/10/2015 2:26:00 PM

Thank you so much, Arthur. It was nothing but a pleasure to write with Liam. We're happy that you liked our poem!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/7/2015 5:21:00 PM

this one is very atmospheric. You two did a hauntingly beautiful duet together.

Kelly Deschler
Date: 5/10/2015 11:56:00 AM

It was nothing but a pleasure to write with Liam. We very much appreciate your nice comments, Andrea!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/7/2015 5:19:00 PM

thanks so much for taking a look at Deep in the Woods. Let me see yours here now.

Kelly Deschler
Date: 5/10/2015 11:52:00 AM

You're welcome, Andrea. I loved that poem of yours :)

Liam Mcdaid

Date: 5/7/2015 3:30:00 PM

your pen danced in the shadows beautifully kelly a pleasure doing this with you pal wishing you a lovely weekend

Kelly Deschler
Date: 5/8/2015 12:19:00 AM

It was wonderful to write this poem with you, Liam. Thank you for bringing back my dark side. I've missed her so much! Have a great weekend my friend :)

Paul Callus

Date: 5/7/2015 9:14:00 AM

Excellent collaboration, Kelly and Liam; very much inspired. Putting wrong things right is not at all easy, but not impossible where there is a will. All the best....paul

Kelly Deschler
Date: 5/10/2015 11:43:00 AM

You're right, Paul. There is always a chance to make amends if we really try, and if those we hurt are willing to forgive us... It was a pleasure to collaborate with Liam. We really appreciate your kind comments :)