At Least

Our hearts were a veritable slow dance And I didn’t have to put my baby In the corner Our retinas became diamond forged binds In serenity’s lock Dipping Your tear ducts within our wishing wells Never Running Dry Our flesh Bringing lukewarm elasticity To gentle boil Every graceful thrust Mimicking fireplace embers Under cabin’s winter moon Until my deep sigh Embedded paragraphs Within “Dear John” parchment … At least Trinity’s hourglass Permitted me to sing I love you choruses Before your hearts’ phone line Disconnected … ©Drake J. Eszes

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Sarai Virden

Date: 11/5/2013 12:09:00 PM

"Until... " "At least... " Depicts some haunted gratitude though the end is clearly in sight. Emotionally charging, a heartfelt piece. As usual with you... A phenomenal talent! Hugs

Poet Tacito
Date: 11/5/2013 12:21:00 PM

=D Thank you so much, Sarai. I'm glad you were able to understand where my head was at here.

Lisa Mccall

Date: 10/11/2013 11:22:00 AM

Well written I love this one

Poet Tacito
Date: 10/11/2013 12:35:00 PM

Hi & thank you very much, Lisa!

Shadow Hamilton

Date: 9/24/2013 4:31:00 AM

This is sensual and beautiful Drake love it Shadow x smile

Poet Tacito
Date: 9/24/2013 7:56:00 AM

Many, many thanks, Shadow. :)

Cindy Lu

Date: 9/14/2013 8:37:00 PM

You brought me to highs and a saddening in such a short format. You are an amazing writer. I'm glad I have the opportunity to read some of your heart's passions and heart wrenching poetry. I really dig your work... Cindy

Poet Tacito
Date: 9/14/2013 8:41:00 PM

I'm very happy you have the opportunity too. It means a lot to me. Thank you so much, Cindy. =)

Mario De Paz

Date: 9/13/2013 11:22:00 AM

Again, I like your impassioned poetry too often full of dreariness, but very effective

Poet Tacito
Date: 9/13/2013 11:39:00 AM

Hey Mario!! It's great to see you again. I just make sure the poem matches the tone. :) It's great to see you again!!!

Jennifer Perry

Date: 9/11/2013 6:47:00 PM

Hi there!! Nice!

Poet Tacito
Date: 9/11/2013 6:50:00 PM

Hey stranger! =D It's been awhile! Thank you, Jennifer!

Christopher Michaels

Date: 9/10/2013 12:33:00 AM

enjoy reading your poem "jcmt"d6

Poet Tacito
Date: 9/10/2013 6:24:00 AM

Thanks, Chris!

Lucilla Carrillo

Date: 9/9/2013 8:29:00 PM

This is good Drake. I enjoyed it very much. Thanks for sharing..... Lucilla

Poet Tacito
Date: 9/9/2013 11:01:00 PM

And thank you for stopping by here, Lucilla. :)

Madelin Barton

Date: 9/9/2013 8:54:00 AM

Raw emotion here so clever a write and seems so heartfelt thank you for sharing such honest and beautiful poem

Poet Tacito
Date: 9/9/2013 9:13:00 AM

Hi & thank you so much, Madelin. I did what I could here. :)

Laura Breidenthal

Date: 9/7/2013 11:45:00 PM

Oooh... cool one! Love the metaphorical ending there! It's all just a bunch of awesome metaphorical genius, but yeah. :) Really good verse. A very fun read. Always, Laura

Poet Tacito
Date: 9/8/2013 12:07:00 AM

Hi, Laura! =D I'm very glad you enjoyed this. I don't think this is even close to genius. But, I know this didn't suck either. lol You're very kind in your comments. Thank you so much!

Charlotte Puddifoot

Date: 9/6/2013 4:03:00 PM

an intriguing piece, as your poems so often are; sensuality mixed with sadness, good use of metaphor, this is what free verse is all about...thanks for stopping by with your uplifting comment :)

Poet Tacito
Date: 9/6/2013 10:24:00 PM

You're very welcome! That was the plan. :) Thank you so much, Charlotte!

Cecilia Macfarlane

Date: 9/5/2013 8:45:00 PM

A romantic night of passion, each knowing it would be their last time in each others arms, they cry tears of joy and sadness. Your writes are like doing puzzles and I love putting the pieces together. Excellent write Drake! Hugs

Poet Tacito
Date: 9/6/2013 7:43:00 AM

You got a great grasp of this writing. Thank you very much for your kind words, Cecilia. :)

Ken Carroll

Date: 9/5/2013 8:34:00 PM

Well penned heartfelt write..Thanks for sharing. Ken

Poet Tacito
Date: 9/6/2013 7:38:00 AM

Hey Ken, good to meet you. Thanks very much for that & stopping by! Cheers!

Lucilla Carrillo

Date: 9/5/2013 3:47:00 PM

A great poem of free verse. It is very well written. I'm back, I don't have to move from here. I can stay in Texas. Thanks for sharing this poem.... Lucilla

Poet Tacito
Date: 9/5/2013 7:54:00 PM

Hi there, Lucilla! I'm glad to hear you're staying. I appreciate your thoughts on this. :)

Kim Van Breda

Date: 9/5/2013 8:52:00 AM

Drake-- you did real good with your first poem of September !! Brilliant.. and this time with plenty of passion thrown in ;) xx

Poet Tacito
Date: 9/5/2013 9:13:00 AM

Thank you so much, Kim. I'm all for that passion. :)

Nette Onclaud

Date: 9/5/2013 8:32:00 AM

buddd! (?), lol... it's okay if you have nothing new today; am enjoying ' Serenity's Valley' and ' With This Ring Title' tracks.. whoo!..:) yet tomorrow is another day!..:) huggs

Nette Onclaud
Date: 9/5/2013 8:46:00 AM

i don't know how it happened, buddd(?)... was just tinkering around and off these strains came now... a feel-good thing, really!.. thanks!..:)

Poet Tacito
Date: 9/5/2013 8:36:00 AM

OMG! Are you listening to my video game soundtrack I made?!?!? NETTE!!!!! Why are you so awesome?! A big thank you hug to you!! You just made my morning. I'll even forgive you for the "bud" comment. ;-) lol

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 9/5/2013 8:18:00 AM

I came back to be further entertained by comments and your responses. I have not been dissapointed. Have a great day Drake.

Poet Tacito
Date: 9/5/2013 8:24:00 AM

Awesome. =) My readers' commentary never seem to let me down. lol I love it! Great to see you again, Richard!

Jack Ellison

Date: 9/5/2013 7:15:00 AM

Hey Drake me mate! Agree with Jack Jordan, "lukewarm elasticity... brilliant! You is da man!

Poet Tacito
Date: 9/5/2013 7:34:00 AM

Ha. Awesome. Thanks so much, Jack!!! =D

Jack Jordan

Date: 9/4/2013 6:41:00 PM

I really like how you put words together. They fit, but almost don't. Romantic & steamy and sad. My favorite lines are "Bringing lukewarm elasticity/To gentle boil" Good stuff... Jack

Poet Tacito
Date: 9/4/2013 6:49:00 PM

Nicely said, Jack! :) I seriously appreciate it! Thank you so much!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/4/2013 2:51:00 PM

Another sad one but sensitive and romantic, how I likes them!!!

Poet Tacito
Date: 9/4/2013 2:54:00 PM

Thanks so much, Andrea. I'm glad you likes! :)

Carrie Richards

Date: 9/4/2013 1:27:00 PM

Many of your poems could be songs to be sung on a rainy night, soft guitar, weeping windows, a dark street light quivering in the wind. This is one.....giving the reader a sense of loneliness, heartbreak, and deep emotion of a love gone wrong. Do you play music, Drake.??....you should put this to chords of a mellow, somber melody...I would cry buckets!!

Poet Tacito
Date: 9/4/2013 2:07:00 PM

You have made me smile so wide. I dabble in piano here & there. I can rock a guitar like nobody's business...in Rock Band. lol I never thought to put this to a song. Maybe I could...??? Thank you so so so much, Carrie.

Nette Onclaud

Date: 9/4/2013 1:14:00 PM

no, no, i'm not nagging.. " at least", a hi today is fine enough, lol..:) huggles!

Poet Tacito
Date: 9/4/2013 2:04:00 PM

LOL sure, Nette. ;-) Hugs & Hi to you too! =D

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 9/4/2013 9:41:00 AM

enjoyed the lyrical qualities

Poet Tacito
Date: 9/4/2013 9:50:00 AM

I appreciate that. Thanks so much!

Sara Kendrick

Date: 9/4/2013 9:36:00 AM

Great work about the topic of love loss..Enjoyed reading your story even though it had a sad ending..Sara

Poet Tacito
Date: 9/4/2013 9:50:00 AM

Thank you very much, Sara. I'm glad you enjoyed!

Eileen Manassian

Date: 9/4/2013 8:23:00 AM

DRAKE!!! :) Read this one yesterday, but it was late and I knew my response would make no sense! ;) Lovely poem...again...sad. :( Drake...seriously...I wish I could crawl up there in your mind and get a line by line of all your write...the author himself unfolding meaning! ;) Hey...don't pull another disappearing act, ya hear? Missed ya!

Poet Tacito
Date: 9/4/2013 9:51:00 AM

LOL! YES! LASAGNA!! You get VIP priviledges! I got your Soupmail. :)

Eileen Manassian
Date: 9/4/2013 9:18:00 AM

BTW...I DO make lasagna...Italian cuisine??? MY FAV!!! Good at baking! So...skip the entrance fee...You're gonna ask me to stay!

Eileen Manassian
Date: 9/4/2013 9:16:00 AM

Hey....I soup mailed ya! At least...I think I did! You know sometimes when you don't get that silly captcha thingy...it doesn't go and if you've already gone on to something else....Anywayz! Let me know! Friggin awesome eh? Takes one to know one! HA HA! Gotcha!

Poet Tacito
Date: 9/4/2013 8:30:00 AM

Be warned: At the gates of my mind there's a $1 + Plate of Italian food entrance fee. The person at the entrance booth will either be Donatello of the Ninja Turtles or Marvin the Martian. ;-) Also, I didn't disappear anywhere. lol It was a Holiday weekend. I was away for just a few days. It's nice to have been missed though. You're friggin awesome, Eileen! Thank you for being you!