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Asleep With Eyes Open

He sits in a chair Looking out to nowhere Haunted blank stare Open eyes unaware Sitting in a chair with wheels No one knows what he feels Is there anything for him that's real A young girl visits every day She hates to see him this way He used to have so much to say She longs for him to be okay His body is near Yet his mind isn't here locked away by fear Look close you may see a tear Through his darkness he hears her voice Awakened he makes a choice His dry tongue becomes moist Back to reality From the brink of infinity Her love sets him free Brings him where he's supposed to be He paid a terrible cost So many years were lost A mind locked in frost The victim of war Shook to his core He couldn't take anymore So his mind shut the door Finally he is awake First tentative steps to make She holds him as he starts to shake Yes they have a new journey to take A soul awakened contest.

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S.Zaynab Kamoonpuri

Date: 5/4/2013 10:21:00 AM

Ah amazing real life poem n u hav picturd d handicap n recovery building it up so swell n well to d end! Gr8 rhymin too. Do read mine latest too.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/4/2013 1:18:00 PM

Thanks, for commenting. I will check out your poem.

Timothy Hicks

Date: 4/23/2013 8:26:00 AM

Hahaha... I've heard ditto before! It's not very common, but I remember saying it a lot when I was around ten or so.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 4/23/2013 8:41:00 AM

:0)

Timothy Hicks

Date: 4/22/2013 7:59:00 PM

I was very moved by your comment on Snow Globe. I'm lucky to have a friend like you :)

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 4/23/2013 6:36:00 AM

I forgot you are probably to young to understand that reference, it means I feel the same.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 4/23/2013 6:35:00 AM

Ditto.

Cecilia Macfarlane

Date: 4/22/2013 4:25:00 PM

A powerful and touching write Rick....love how this man's soul was finally awakened! Hugs

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 4/23/2013 6:38:00 AM

Hugs back

Eileen Manassian

Date: 4/22/2013 1:00:00 PM

Amazing....I know that blank expression well. I saw it in my Mom's eyes often when MS would become exacerbated. I wanted to shake her "awake". It stung. This brings memories. The mind...a terrible thing to lose. Very extremely well written...to the point of bringing tears

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 4/22/2013 3:43:00 PM

Thanks Eileen, sorry you and your mom had to go through that experience.

Mandy Tams The Golden Girl

Date: 4/22/2013 10:38:00 AM

awesome Richard xx

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 4/22/2013 3:52:00 PM

thanks Mandy

Timothy Hicks

Date: 4/22/2013 10:08:00 AM

Also... about the new avatar. It was very cold where I was at. I thought it was time for a new picture, and I felt my older pic was too somber. Photos, in my opinion, should show a person smiling (for the most part anyway).

Timothy Hicks

Date: 4/22/2013 10:05:00 AM

Asleep with eyes open... such a cool contradiction, that is. I'm left to wander the things he has witnessed, the things he did, that would leave him to this chronic state of depression. It shows just how hard moving on is for some people...

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 4/22/2013 3:53:00 PM

Thanks Timothy, some horrors we can't even imagine.

Sima Mittal

Date: 4/22/2013 7:55:00 AM

I think its so real and awesome!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 4/22/2013 7:57:00 AM

Thanks Sima