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As I Saw You

Your voice echoes in my mind Your visage blacks my thoughts I coundnt find you in the darkness Your breathe is a lie I bought Our bond is stronger than Earth Held together with the mellow moon Your eyes leads to another person I sit alone indignant in the afternoon Fire burns into my nostrils A storm rages in my mind Our taken by the sun's arms No second chance would combine

Copyright © | Year Posted 2016




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Date: 9/22/2016 10:35:00 AM
A nice effort, but a few errors in spelling and a few missing words, (I think) nice feel to it, but I'm left feeling incomplete, sorry but honest comment. Keep writing!
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Morgen Farmer
Date: 9/22/2016 4:45:00 PM
Thank You John. I'll revise it.
Date: 9/22/2016 9:45:00 AM
Nice job!!!
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Morgen Farmer
Date: 9/22/2016 4:46:00 PM
Thank You Rick.
Date: 9/22/2016 9:01:00 AM
Well written on the whole but a few typos you might want to check over.
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Morgen Farmer
Date: 9/22/2016 4:45:00 PM
Absolutely Keith, I'll revise it. Thank You so much for reading it.
Date: 9/22/2016 5:44:00 AM
Well written ...
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Morgen Farmer
Date: 9/22/2016 4:46:00 PM
Thank You Probir.

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