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Arachnophobia

With this fear I'm a slave Just like digging my own grave Stitch stitch Hush hush Spiders in your bed Stitch stitch Hush hush Spiders in your head Spinning up Spinning down Climbs in your hair Gives you a stare Stitch stitch Hush hush Spiders in your bed Stitch stitch Hush hush Spiders in your head Tiny legs walking In your skin crawling Making wounds wider Nothing can hinder Just like a dead flower Making me wither Stitch stitch Hush hush Spiders in your bed Stitch stitch Hush hush Spiders in your head Takes a bite Just a slight Poisonous fangs This sad song I sang My view gets hazy Making me go crazy And as I bleed My words do heed Stitch stitch Hush hush Spiders in your bed Stitch stitch Hush hush Spiders in your head Accidentally deleted this Poem My bad Rewrote it and this came out. I dunno if better or worse or same-same For the contest "Along Came a Spider" 5/30/13 Pls. do leave a Comment (/>_<)/ _|__|_

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Date: 6/29/2013 10:21:00 PM
Nato, love your use of repetition to generate fear, congratulations on your win.
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Date: 6/20/2013 4:53:00 PM
OK so you have me scratching. Congratulations on your poem and win. Love, Joyce
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Date: 6/5/2013 12:43:00 PM
I am glad you suggested I read this. I really like it. The 'stitch stitch' is like the sound I imagine they make creeping along.
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Date: 6/4/2013 1:11:00 AM
this is kind of a creepy one!! A scary one for the contest! I hope it does well for you. It is unique! I was wondering if you did funny poems. Let me know which one is funniest if you have it here.
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Date: 5/30/2013 9:53:00 AM
I'm agreeing with nette... I really liked the repetition you have here... sort of made me think of the spider spinning his web.... stitch stitch, hush hush. Pretty catchy. Catch a fly. And I saw your comment in my poem--ulitin ko dito-- medyo kalerky ka naman eh o_O -- "binibini" na nga, tapos P.ink pa. Hmmm sige pwede na rin na naniguro ka, given na baka pwedeng mala BB Gandang Hari ang peg ko... haha.
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Date: 5/30/2013 3:32:00 AM
i like the repetitive syle and great tonality of this write... lovely cadence, great to be pinoy!...:) huggs
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