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Apples - Multiple Haiku

It bounced off the truck And then rolled down the highway Apple turnover ----------------------------------------- How 'bout them apples When Jonathan McIntosh Won the spelling bee ---------------------------------------- Apple of my eye Jenny had the sweetest smile For another guy ---------------------------------------- Right down to the core When that apple crossed the plate An infield dribble ------------------------------------------------------ Just one little hole In that shiny red apple Just one little worm -------------------------------------------------------------

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 12/27/2015 3:32:00 PM

this used to be second best poem but now you have Two above it and it is at third best! I think your haiku sets do the best with the poets here for faves!!

Skat A

Date: 6/3/2015 11:56:00 PM

LOL, Daver sorry to hear about Jenny, I bet you got a better deal

Daver Austin
Date: 6/4/2015 11:48:00 AM

Who is Jenny? Is she a lost love? Have I been cast aside like a short dildo? What? Love, Old daver

Matthew Anish

Date: 7/29/2014 11:33:00 PM

You cut through to the "core" with these apple odes! Peace & Blessings Matthew Anish

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/28/2014 1:29:00 PM

Daver, this is your second best poem on the Soup!! I really like this list. Let me see your third place!

Nicole King

Date: 10/16/2012 7:28:00 PM

very unique. congrats :)

Daver Austin

Date: 10/16/2012 10:09:00 AM

Hi, Leo. Thanks for reading my stuff. This work is a truly beautifully dedication. Feel like I know him. Love, daver

Leo Larry Amadore

Date: 10/15/2012 8:10:00 PM

A nice barrel of apples, indeed...clever and competently crafted haiku...

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/3/2010 12:51:00 AM

oh, here is a little group of cute senryu I missed! the BEsT ONE is the first one, apple turnover. Priceless. Second best, Apple of my eye! LUv, Andrea

James Fraser

Date: 5/26/2009 3:36:00 PM

Clever Haiku Daver, witty and bright, James

James Marshall Goff

Date: 4/23/2009 12:22:00 PM

Daver, your comments are priceless! and this haiku-set is delicious and well-written! the only multiple haiku I've tried is my 'ides of gitchigumi' thanks for readin' my poems!....and psss. NEVER SAY DIE!!!

Barbara Gorelick

Date: 11/2/2008 10:56:00 AM

Just one of these little pieces would enchant..but all together they are priceless. Funny too. Love it. BG

Date: 10/10/2008 6:53:00 AM

Hi Daver, first thank you for your kind words regarding my poem. Now, to answer your question regarding haiku. It's pretty widely accepted that English haiku do not have to adhere to the strict syllable count as it is an Asian form which sometimes doesn't work without adding meaningless words to fill the count. Some editors still like the 5-7-5 structure, so it's best to check the guidelines before submitting. Some masters use less than half the original count. I hope that helps. Karen

Date: 10/9/2008 2:12:00 PM

What a creative way to use this short form!! I really got a good chuckle out of the first haiku and lured me in for the rest. What enjoyable reading. Thank you for sharing. Karen

Heidie Buys

Date: 9/28/2008 9:27:00 AM

So very clever and enjoyable to read. You out did yourself with these ones. Well done. Regards Heidie

John Loving Iii

Date: 9/27/2008 6:00:00 AM

witty and wise. john

Vince Suzadail Jr.

Date: 9/26/2008 8:22:00 AM

Nohing worse than a worm in an apple except a half a worm. Have a great day, Daver. Vince

Carrie Richards

Date: 9/25/2008 7:12:00 PM

I have one for you!! Little Miss Muffet, Sat on her tuffet....ect,etc, etc. ....along came a spider and sat down be----cider.....oh well....not that funny...didn't come out nearly as well as yours!! Great job Daver...clever use of haiku, very original! ~ Carrie

Laura Mckenzie

Date: 9/25/2008 11:02:00 AM

Wow so clever I enjoyed each one Excellent!!! Lots of fun! Laura :)

Kristin Reynolds

Date: 9/25/2008 3:51:00 AM

I agree with Sharon - you had me at apple turnover. :) a fine bushel here, Daver, well done. love Kristin

George Anos

Date: 9/24/2008 8:52:00 PM

NICE ONES!!! enjoyed reading it. Funny Jenny.. LOL...

Sharon Winter

Date: 9/24/2008 1:28:00 PM

My number one, absolute favorite is...Apple Turnover!!! So funny. Now in the mood for an apple. : ) Love, Shar