Another Chance

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I woke up today, I think I did A faint beep beep in my ear Silent rustling of clothes Dust sparks in sun beams Blinding my eyes I think I am awake, today There is a vague memory of hands taking me down of performing first aid of voices, soft and soothing I am awake, I am, today I didn't think I'd ever I surrendered, gave up I get another chance But do I want it? *** 3d place in: "A second chance" Contest Monday September 5, 2016

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Tom Arnone

Date: 9/9/2016 10:42:00 AM

I like the premise. Would you want a second chance if it meant a long stretch in prison with an unforgiving conscience for some unspeakable crime. Or, perhaps, some recently acquired, debilitating illness and/or horrible deformity? Congrats on your win....

Darren White
Date: 9/9/2016 12:28:00 PM

Indeed. And that's why it is a valid question. Thank you :)

Jan Allison

Date: 9/8/2016 2:12:00 AM

dropping back with my congrats Darren - you are flying high with all your recent contest wins:-) hugs jan xx

Darren White
Date: 9/8/2016 2:20:00 AM

I am happy :) Writing and sending in poems for contests is fun in itself, but this is wonderful. Hugs!

Lu Loo

Date: 9/7/2016 4:21:00 PM

Darren, congrats on your placement :)-luloo

Darren White
Date: 9/7/2016 11:12:00 PM

Thank you, it is wonderful \o/

Nayda Ivette Negron Flores

Date: 9/7/2016 2:50:00 PM

Congratulations Darren on the placement of the contest.

Darren White
Date: 9/7/2016 3:50:00 PM

Oooohhhh. Thank you soooo much. I am delighted :)

Jan Allison

Date: 9/5/2016 2:58:00 AM

Very deep Darren - I love the final stanza and the questioning of if it was the right thing to have happened. I've heard of people being resuscitated although it was their desire to end their life because of the pain they suffered . Good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx

Darren White
Date: 9/5/2016 3:13:00 AM

Thank you Jan :) *nods*