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Anorexic & Obese

Grass Calls for More and more And I water and water. The Obese: Expires Hitherto, that grass Spikingly Winds up by the"Plop, Plop" Snubbing over the drops. And Passes. The Olive Grass Gawking incessantly out at the flecked Rays I witness them dance They post me the murmuring messages Of the Wind.

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Jay Loveless

Date: 6/8/2009 10:05:00 AM

Awesome Visuals.

Patricia Langston-Moran

Date: 6/4/2009 10:11:00 AM

Saidah...your metaphors are magnificent..."The Olive Grass"..I am reading all your poetry today. You are a POET!! Patricia

Brandy Megens

Date: 5/27/2009 8:41:00 AM

I LOVE THE WAY YOU GRABBED THE IMAGERY AND PORTRAYED A STORY FOR US TO READ YOU ARE A NEAT POET AND I LIKE YOUR STYLE

Cesar Cantu

Date: 5/26/2009 1:44:00 PM

@.@ great one, I love onomatopeyas (don't know if that's the correct word in English jojjo); the images, I don't know if your poem works in several layers or you like using very diverse images, however they work, oh yeah!! thanks for sharing bye bye =D and by the way, I heard the song jojjo it is nice =) yet I think I am more like mmm have you ever heard Interstellar Overdrive, from Pink Floyd? Listen if you want to, jojojo it turns interesting from minute 2 =) bye bye