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An Aching Heart's Last Beat

Slowly in ones and feeble twos The heavy pain made the heart shrew Corrupting the thick muscles of the heart, let living a few And infecting the feelings too But now it is silent like an empty room Unlike the blaring rays of the sun, but like that of the opposite, moon Now the pain had all gone, and dead But replaced by a lifeless silence instead Now it lay alone on the cloudy bed Ruled by a boring eternal death

Copyright © | Year Posted 2015




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Date: 2/5/2016 2:44:00 PM
My dear friend, i was glad to read that in your reply to Silent you said this was a fictional write. This does actually make the write even better for the emotions written seem so real. Always let the emotions run free my friend, happy or sad, let the heart speak as you have done here. Another excellent write my friend. A seven from me....Vladislav.
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Date: 2/5/2016 4:37:00 PM
thanks Vladislav, I appreciate that comment, sometimes i chose to write about a lost and sometimes about love (which am not so good at), i am glad you came by, making me feel complimented as always
Date: 12/31/2015 8:00:00 AM
Powerful title and very deep sad imagery Shehu:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 12/31/2015 8:05:00 AM
thanks Jan
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Date: 12/31/2015 8:05:00 AM
thanks Jan
Date: 12/31/2015 7:01:00 AM
For reasons in plain sight, this is indeed a potent piece. The title: very gripping. The pain "corrupting" the muscles: powerful stuff. Great write again, Shehu.
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Date: 12/31/2015 7:06:00 AM
thanks for the comment dear Michael

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