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An Accident

Driving home late one foggy night I came across a dreadful sight A car wrapped round an old oak tree The driver desperately trying to flee Fiery flames were leaping round The car engine making a screeching sound I pulled up sharp and went to their aid Made sure I rang the fire brigade But the searing heat held me back I quickly ran to a run down old shack An old man was sobbing on the floor He pointed out of the peeling door The weeping tree for that’s its name Claimed an innocent victim yet again Believe me he said, it has ruined my life It was there I found my daughter and wife Thirty-three years ago to this very day At the base of the tree their bodies lay It was on a murky misty night like this Now my life is a dismal dark abyss I soon could see a blue flashing light Turned around and got an awful fright Not a car or a tree could be seen Then I awoke... it was just a terrible dream 08~14~14 Contest Three Themes Sponsored by Shadow Hamilton Theme ‘An Accident’ ~awarded 2nd Place~

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Poet Destroyer A

Date: 9/2/2014 10:05:00 AM

Glad to know that...Linda

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 9/2/2014 8:54:00 AM

Hope you are well, stopping by to read and follow up with my forgotten replies.. thank you. have a nice day. Linda

Jan Allison
Date: 9/2/2014 9:26:00 AM

I'm coping OK thanks Linda:-) Hugs Jan xx

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 8/16/2014 1:19:00 AM

Congrats on a fine win with amazing write on accident, Jan

Jan Allison
Date: 8/16/2014 4:18:00 AM

Thank you so much Dr Mehta:-) Hugs jan xxx

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 8/16/2014 12:55:00 AM

Congrats on ur awesome winning write Jan!

Jan Allison
Date: 8/16/2014 4:17:00 AM

Thanks for dropping by with your comment:-) Hugs Jan xxx

Joseph May

Date: 8/15/2014 10:09:00 PM

Congrats on your win Jan...nicely done

Jan Allison
Date: 8/16/2014 4:17:00 AM

Thanks Joseph for the lovely comment:-) Hugs Jan xxx

Hija De La Luna

Date: 8/15/2014 9:12:00 PM

oh Am glad it was just a dream! powerful write, you got me there! Congratulations, Jan! hugs :))

Jan Allison
Date: 8/16/2014 4:16:00 AM

Many thanks for your comment:-) Hugs jan xxx

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 8/15/2014 9:08:00 PM

Jan, enjoyed the poem... and win...Linda

Jan Allison
Date: 8/16/2014 4:16:00 AM

Thanks for the lovely comment Linda always so lovely to see your beautiful smile:-) Hugs jan xxx

Earl Schumacker

Date: 8/15/2014 6:08:00 PM

Hi Jan, Congratulations on a great win. I was getting concerned while I was reading this. I'm glad it was only a dream. I can breath again. Keep up the good work. Take care. Earl.

Jan Allison
Date: 8/15/2014 6:10:00 PM

Thanks Earl - I struggled to find an ending - walked way from the poem for an hour then got inspired - am happy with the final result:-) Hugs Jan xxx

Faye Gibson

Date: 8/15/2014 2:29:00 PM

Wow, Jan, this is one of your best. You had me believing it. A well deserved win. Congratulations.

Jan Allison
Date: 8/15/2014 2:30:00 PM

Thank you so much Faye I struggled to end it but am really pleased with the final result:-) Hugs jan xxx

Shadow Hamilton

Date: 8/15/2014 2:12:00 PM

so vivid a description Jan lifts this poem to brilliancy congrats on 2nd place hugs

Jan Allison
Date: 8/15/2014 2:13:00 PM

Many thanks Shadow I really enjoyed this challenge:-) Hugs jan xxx

Tim Smith

Date: 8/15/2014 1:58:00 PM

Congrats Jan ....you continue to be on a roll with your great writes...hugs Tim

Jan Allison
Date: 8/15/2014 2:00:00 PM

ooh I didn't realise it had been judged - thanks Tim:- ) Have an awesome weekend will miss seeing you around- am sure you will have some tales to tell when you return:-) Hugs Jan xxx

Leslie Philibert

Date: 8/15/2014 7:37:00 AM

Fine write with classical quatrains and AABB..

Jan Allison
Date: 8/15/2014 7:57:00 AM

Thank you so much. I am relatively new to writing only been posting since February and I do appreciate your lovely comment. Hugs Jan xx

Sara Kendrick

Date: 8/14/2014 4:58:00 PM

Reads like a winner to me..Way to go with this one..A surprise ending make it perfect.Thanks for the visit to my page..Sara

Jan Allison
Date: 8/14/2014 5:03:00 PM

Wow thanks Sara for the lovely comment - I struggled with the ending - walked away from the poem for an hour and came back refreshed- am happy with it now:-) Hugs jan xxx

Tim Smith

Date: 8/14/2014 2:56:00 PM

Oh wow Jan..Incredible piece....love it...hugs Tim :)

Jan Allison
Date: 8/14/2014 3:19:00 PM

Wow Tim I swim like a stone I nearly drowned when I was 6 so am not good in deep water:-( Hugs Jan xx

Tim Smith
Date: 8/14/2014 3:02:00 PM

Things are looking good :) well good as good can be after 5 hours of swimming :)

Jan Allison
Date: 8/14/2014 2:59:00 PM

Thanks Tim for the lovely comment. I was struggling with the ending but am really happy with it now - keep in touch my friend:-) Hugs as ever Jan xxxx

J. R. Corbin

Date: 8/14/2014 2:30:00 PM

This is an excellent entry for the contest, Jan. Sad but beautifully written. Very nice. Jim

Jan Allison
Date: 8/14/2014 2:31:00 PM

Thanks Jim for the lovely comment - at least it had a happy ending! Hugs Jan xxx