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Those little bridges Perfect eyebrows Half-moons trampled by feet that don't care callously tarry. The questions in extinguished glances a play staged for dwindling feet for faces are shameful from corners of eyes under fading half moon a price charged negotiated in the red glare of evening wet cobblestones. The heavy sweet scent nickers around corners eyebrows raised over glassy eyes sitting between evening hordes of cut-off legs senseless lemmings that walk, walk to nowhere. *** August 21, 2017 Copyright © Darren White

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Date: 9/15/2017 6:02:00 PM
Great write Darren, very clear descriptions of the city, I remember in 2010 I went to find my relatives, my wife and I spent some time there and also Italy and Switzerland, unforgettable memories, thanks for that!
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Date: 8/23/2017 4:45:00 PM
Nickers....I love that. I was there gaping as a Catholic 19 year old. I must return Darren. It is only a hop, skip and a jump from here. Can I bring my new bike ?
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Darren White
Date: 8/23/2017 11:46:00 PM
heh, yeah, this country is friendly for bicycles and -cyclists ;)
Date: 8/23/2017 1:03:00 PM
Oh my god I absolutely love this poem. It resonates with me. I love the verse 'Half moons trampled by feet that don't care.' Amazing writing.
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Darren White
Date: 8/23/2017 11:45:00 PM
Thanks for the compliment Iris :)
Date: 8/22/2017 10:15:00 PM
I loved this one Darren, such depth, and contemplative.
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Darren White
Date: 8/23/2017 1:16:00 AM
Yeah my friend. Observations I made on many occasions :)
Date: 8/21/2017 6:57:00 PM
oh Gosh Darren such awesome imagery - the red light area, the 'coffee shops' and that smokey smell that can't be disguised lol I used to visit Amsterdam regularly as a child as my mum had a penfriend there I last went about 10 years ago. Thanks for the memories ... It's one of my favourite cities!:-) hugs jan x
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Darren White
Date: 8/22/2017 12:48:00 AM
Yeah I know Jan :) Glad you love the poem and Amsterdam
Date: 8/21/2017 2:50:00 PM
I guess it is true that beauty is only skin deep. The photo is very pretty but is laying just outside of sight is disheartening. Thank you for the insight written so well.
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Darren White
Date: 8/22/2017 12:46:00 AM
Beauty is truly only skin deep..... if you only look for external beuty :) Thank you Patricia
Date: 8/21/2017 10:22:00 AM
Brilliant pen my friend. xomo!
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Darren White
Date: 8/22/2017 12:45:00 AM
thanks so much ma mo :)
Date: 8/21/2017 9:37:00 AM
A great description of Amsterdam Darren...hope all is alright my friend...god bless...^WW^
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Darren White
Date: 8/22/2017 12:44:00 AM
Yeah, it is, thank you my friend :)
Date: 8/21/2017 9:18:00 AM
But it is a beautiful walk
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Darren White
Date: 8/22/2017 12:42:00 AM
It is, I agree :)
Date: 8/21/2017 6:23:00 AM
"eyebrows raised over glassy eyes" is a definite sight you see... I spent a few weeks there a few years ago...it's something to behold... You brought back memories...Thanks for sharing...Have a nice day
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Darren White
Date: 8/22/2017 12:42:00 AM
Happy you liked your visit, thank you Arturo!
Date: 8/21/2017 5:54:00 AM
If you described each place so beautifully, how can I sit in my home?? Wonderful description that draws the reader in, Darren:)
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Darren White
Date: 8/22/2017 12:40:00 AM
Come visit Amsterdam Jo :)
Date: 8/21/2017 5:07:00 AM
A wonderful write Darren, and another place on the 'bucket list' to see. ...Maria
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Darren White
Date: 8/22/2017 12:39:00 AM
Thanks Maria :)
Date: 8/21/2017 4:49:00 AM
Gorgeous, Darren, really gorgeous ... I have never been, but it's on my Bucket List. Wonderful writing ...
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Darren White
Date: 8/22/2017 12:38:00 AM
It's a wonderful city. My University is there, actually right next to the Red Light District :)
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Date: 8/21/2017 7:00:00 PM
Go if you get the chance Greg its one of my favourite cities and i used to go about 3 times every year when I was a youngster - there are so many galleries and museums to visit but the Anne Frank museum is incredible it gives me a chill down my spine visiting it I must have been at least 3 times:-) hugs jan xx

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