Ambush

A brook cascades daintily extant ~ flowing gayly heart’s incited joy Meandering, nestles on Peace ~ quivering restraints strain ‘n squirm Breaking-bank, careens downwards ~ extols faith’s grim heart-bomb Undulating, veering waves extrapolate ~ Yonder’s zooming blue-adieu Sojourns, so-longs, traversing under veils ~ weathering wry extremes Heart’s incessant journey keels love’s mainland ~ new opaque's reach... (10/7/21 For 'Islands in the Stream' contest)

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Paula Goldsmith

Date: 1/5/2022 1:34:00 PM

A wonderful write. I enjoyed it. Have a blessed day writing away..................

Susan Woodrow
Date: 1/5/2022 5:22:00 PM

thank you! glad you enjoyed it :)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/18/2021 1:34:00 PM

Nicely done, Susan. I was totally stumped by that contest. You came up with very clever images.

Susan Woodrow
Date: 10/18/2021 8:45:00 PM

Thank you :)

Harry Horsman

Date: 10/10/2021 8:22:00 AM

It flows along it's journey, love how the start and finish of this gem, and all in between.

Susan Woodrow
Date: 10/10/2021 2:57:00 PM

Thank you:)

Brian Sambourne

Date: 10/8/2021 10:25:00 AM

The heart is indeed on a ceaseless journey, opaque in its reach. Thought provoking poem. So well penned. Sincerest regards, Brian

Susan Woodrow
Date: 10/8/2021 11:38:00 AM

Yes it is… thank you :)

Susan Ashley

Date: 10/8/2021 7:49:00 AM

Dearest Susan, I love how you morphed the form, and as always, I adore your creative pen. Your exquisite, unique style is ever admired, my inspiring friend. Wonderful with vibrant imagery and splashes of alliteration. Best wishes for a win and warmest wishes for you, my fav Sue! ~Susan

Susan Woodrow
Date: 10/8/2021 11:36:00 AM

Dear Fave Susan, it’s wonderful to have you visit and know the morph didn’t have morphine effects on you Thank you and the best to you always:))

Chris Green

Date: 10/8/2021 5:31:00 AM

What a wonderful concept to frame out a enchanting poem that leaves the reader floating in a mist of beautiful exotic visions. Definition: Pretty damn cool. Best of luck in the contest.

Susan Woodrow
Date: 10/8/2021 6:04:00 AM

Haha! if it’s got you floating in exotica then I’m very happy and i like your defined translation Thank you Chris :)

Jan Allison

Date: 10/8/2021 3:50:00 AM

such vivid imagery Susan, I've never seen an acrostic written with the extended lines. I especially like the Undulating line. good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx

Susan Woodrow
Date: 10/8/2021 6:01:00 AM

Thank you Jan… I wrote it first in my usual style but it didn’t make the minimum 10 lines so i morphed the form lol Glad you liked it :)