Alone

Cut straight to the bone, In the middle of this combat zone, Sounds so full blown, To me it's just another stepping stone, If I only had a clone, noone should have to be alone, My heart beats slow, For it's covered in stone, Inside feels like home, Til I was ripped from my throne, Here just to pospone, Added to be the unknown, My voice has no real tone,

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The Fringe

Date: 6/1/2011 4:02:00 PM

I love the line, "If I only had a clone". I'd be living it up while he was at work for me. Perhaps we're like in the movie "The Island" and we're surrogates for our masters in a grand world until they need our organs haha. If that's true, are they lonely? Probably, but they'll take our organs when they need them haha. I just hope my master acknowledges that I'm at least alive before they gut me and tear me from my throne. Good write man.

Jessica Arteaga

Date: 5/31/2011 10:22:00 AM

i love my voice has no real tone line enjoyed reading your poem true no one should be alone, but you also shouldn't feel alone when by yourself

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 5/31/2011 7:02:00 AM

wonderful rhyme sequence Scott and I am a rhyme girl... much of my poetry is written in rhyme... this is very well penned luv.. great message too..