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All Gone In the Gust of Wind

All were gone in the gust of wind. Not yet fully grown up into a woman She was to leave home for a man. What type of rules are they that bind? Young girls to quit family for another And before time, be already a mother. None ever bothered to know her mind. Before she could understand her roles, Confined she was to daily filling of bowls And nursing babies, to which she resigned. One day, he died, taking his own life. Blame she carried of being a bad wife. Their boy and girl he cruelly left behind. In hardship for a living, she was hurled. Hoping her angels would change her world, Night and day, she toiled blind. One day, she slept such a sleep deep; Her lovely angels forever went to sleep As if fate had kept bad luck all aligned; For an accidental flame to give them a skelp. She did not hear them crying for help While they burnt alive in room confined! 28/08/16 Contest:Best Sad Poem EVER - Laura Loo (Placed 2nd) Based on a real incident where two adolescents burned alive last week on the first floor. The mother did hear them crying for help but too late. (Partly fictional)

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Date: 7/26/2017 5:29:00 PM
They say a partner who commits suicide leaves a curse on those they leave behind and "Sunita" your insight and depiction of this is brilliantly wrote - you are a heart felt woman - although I have not commented on all of the poems I have read by you - it is very clear you are a very spiritual lady - looking forward to reading on - Indiana x x x
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Sunita U.D Palawon
Date: 7/26/2017 11:51:00 PM
I thank you a lot for devoting me your time to read my poem and for the deep analysis you provide in your comment. I really appreciate your connection to the profound. You are an enlightened person. Really appreciate. :) Sunita
Date: 9/22/2016 5:51:00 PM
It's a very sad poem made universal for such fire victims. You've written in fine selected words. I love it. Congrats.
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Sunita U.D Palawon
Date: 9/22/2016 9:49:00 PM
Thanks for the read. I'm glad you can link with it. Indeed very sad incident. Regards Sunita
Date: 9/13/2016 7:41:00 PM
gosh words cant describe it except yours did well done x
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Sunita U.D Palawon
Date: 9/14/2016 7:58:00 AM
Yes Gail...this was terrible for all us here. Thanks for the going through. Appreciated,Sunita
Date: 9/3/2016 5:12:00 AM
I remember this sad incident Sunita! Excellent! Congratulations on your second placement! : ) 7
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Sunita U.D Palawon
Date: 9/4/2016 7:19:00 AM
Thanks Connie for going through and appreciating. I wanted to share the pain with you all and i put them in words. At time we're just helpless in face of such terrible events. thanks again Sunita
Date: 8/29/2016 10:12:00 AM
Sunita, such wonderful flow and what I was looking for...congrats on your placement and thank you for being a part of my contest :)-luloo
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Sunita U.D Palawon
Date: 8/29/2016 11:24:00 AM
Thanks Laura for appreciating and motivation given through your contests. I enjoyed this one. Congrats to you and all the winners! :) Sunita
Date: 8/28/2016 12:15:00 PM
Sunita this poems deserves a high placement. Best wishes for the contest.
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Sunita U.D Palawon
Date: 8/28/2016 12:27:00 PM
Thanks for the kind words. Glad you enjoyed it. :) Sunita
Date: 8/28/2016 8:16:00 AM
What a heartbreaking story - and how well written. Good luck on the contest.
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Sunita U.D Palawon
Date: 8/28/2016 9:45:00 AM
Thanks for going through Volta, it has been indeed a tragic accident and i'm still affected by it. thanks for your valuable comment. Sunita

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