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All Black and Smoky

Long-winged smoky wisps curling up Now drifting like wind driven clouds Then swirling like cobwebby curtains Screaming sirens outside the house Circling about darkening the hamlets Outside the room shrieking of sirens Windows seemed miles away As he came near the window All he could see was acrid smoke Devilish red flames burning his skin. Pitter patter of footsteps coming up Making his hairs stand up all around The knot of fear grew bigger & bigger The remains were all black and smoky. ++++++ ======================= Date 12-10-13 5th place win Dr. Ram Mehta Country Music Contest: Groove it by nette onclaud

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Date: 10/30/2013 12:26:00 PM
Dr Ram, , enjoyed your GROOVE IT win............. ~LOVE SKAT~
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Date: 10/30/2013 12:15:00 PM
Congratulations on your win friend Ram :) cheers
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Date: 10/28/2013 6:17:00 PM
A unique take on the country music theme. Well Done! Congratulations on your win!
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Date: 10/28/2013 11:58:00 AM
Dr Ram. ... congratulations on your win...LINDA
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Date: 10/27/2013 8:34:00 PM
love your use of images in this piece...nice write and a fine win...congrats :)
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Date: 10/22/2013 4:14:00 PM
Dr. Ram this is a deep and emotional write. The reader actually feels like they are in that fiery blaze with the imagery you created. Nice job Thanks for the nice comment on my Fireworks poem.
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Date: 10/18/2013 4:20:00 PM
thank you, dr. ram... kindly put the music genre below your poem... thank you..:)
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Date: 10/13/2013 8:13:00 AM
IF this if for Nette's contest, it looks like you went with hard rock as the music genre. Well done!!
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Date: 10/13/2013 8:01:00 AM
Excellent. Well penned. Enjoyed reading it . Tfs
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Date: 10/12/2013 11:07:00 PM
This took me to a scene during a time when the world didn't have any firefighters yet. I felt like I was outside a burning manor and its masters were being embraced by the flames.
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