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All black and smoky

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All black and smoky

Long-winged smoky wisps curling up
Now drifting like wind driven clouds
Then swirling like cobwebby curtains
Screaming sirens outside the house
Circling about darkening the hamlets

Outside the room shrieking of sirens
Windows seemed miles away
As he came near the window 
All he could see was acrid smoke
Devilish red flames burning his skin.

Pitter patter of footsteps coming up
Making his hairs stand up all around
The knot of fear grew bigger & bigger
The remains were all black and smoky.


Date 12-10-13
5th place win
Dr. Ram Mehta       
Country Music
Contest: Groove it by nette onclaud

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  1. Date: 10/30/2013 12:26:00 PM
    Dr Ram, , enjoyed your GROOVE IT win............. ~LOVE SKAT~

  1. Date: 10/30/2013 12:15:00 PM
    Congratulations on your win friend Ram :) cheers

  1. Date: 10/28/2013 6:17:00 PM
    A unique take on the country music theme. Well Done! Congratulations on your win!

  1. Date: 10/28/2013 11:58:00 AM
    Dr Ram. ... congratulations on your win...LINDA

  1. Date: 10/27/2013 8:34:00 PM
    love your use of images in this piece...nice write and a fine win...congrats :)

  1. Date: 10/22/2013 4:14:00 PM
    Dr. Ram this is a deep and emotional write. The reader actually feels like they are in that fiery blaze with the imagery you created. Nice job Thanks for the nice comment on my Fireworks poem.

  1. Date: 10/18/2013 4:20:00 PM
    thank you, dr. ram... kindly put the music genre below your poem... thank you..:)

  1. Date: 10/13/2013 8:47:00 PM
    Excellent imagery, Dr. Mehta.

  1. Date: 10/13/2013 8:13:00 AM
    IF this if for Nette's contest, it looks like you went with hard rock as the music genre. Well done!!

  1. Date: 10/13/2013 8:01:00 AM
    Excellent. Well penned. Enjoyed reading it . Tfs

  1. Date: 10/13/2013 5:00:00 AM
    Great write Doc, takes me back to a time when we were surrounded by a wall of fire, and nearly lost our house, Loved it....Peter

  1. Date: 10/12/2013 11:07:00 PM
    This took me to a scene during a time when the world didn't have any firefighters yet. I felt like I was outside a burning manor and its masters were being embraced by the flames.