Aha Moment

closed eyes are startled the dark has turned a dusk gray sun rises slowly

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/8/2014 8:19:00 PM

I'm glad to see this one on the list. It is one that I really like.

Nette Onclaud

Date: 8/8/2014 2:32:00 PM

a poetic nature feast, frederic.. huge congrats!.. huggs

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 8/8/2014 12:46:00 PM

Congrats on winning lovely haiku Frederic!

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 8/8/2014 11:49:00 AM

- Congratulations on your Haiku "Aha" Moment - // Anne-Lise :)

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 8/8/2014 1:23:00 AM

Lovely haiku, congrats on the win, frederic

Paul Callus

Date: 8/6/2014 2:59:00 AM

Lovely transition from night to day, Frederic. gl in the contest. // paul

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/5/2014 3:08:00 PM

That is interesting what you responded to me down here. wouldn't it also go against the grain to have the "stronger" sex be the one who was at first afraid of death and then succumbed to it with no fear? I wish I could have said in my haiku how he was fighting cancer and did not want to die before it happened, but haiku is too small to allow all my thoughts!!

Frederic Parker
Date: 8/5/2014 3:36:00 PM

my perspective is from that of a male and yours that of a female, I find that interesting that we would perceive this death from our points of view..it never occured to me that in the end the guy would not leave with dignity no matter how frightened to start..women on the other hand being the bearer of life would fight death, or am I wrong here

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/2/2014 9:06:00 PM

yes, this happens to a lot of us every day! about my aha moment, you said something about using feminine voice. I was wanted to tell you about my inspiration. I had watched a cool movie yesterday in which the guy fights against cancer, and finally he lets himself go to death saying he is not afraid. I am curious why you think "she" would sound better!

Frederic Parker
Date: 8/2/2014 9:26:00 PM

because of perception, that women are the weaker sex and the one in the poem is showing great strength, I thought it would go against perception...

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/2/2014 9:06:00 PM

by the way, I think you have a winner here!

Nette Onclaud

Date: 8/2/2014 1:34:00 PM

fine epiphany of a ku as highlighted by your last line, Frederick... ohhh.. huggs