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In deepest, darkest depths of my despair I find myself without a saving grace. A pendulum of pain prevents my prayer from rising upward through the dead of space. Within these walls a war where no one wins repeats itself just like a worn-out rhyme. No swain should e’er succumb to swinish sins, for he who does the crime must do the time. And yet there was a time I loved her true, and in those days we dreamt without restraint. These merry memories now make me rue a life I should have lived with more constraint. For now, I dwell inside this cursed abyss, a captive soul who longs for heaven's bliss. * This English sonnet was accepted and published in the journal, Society of Classical Poetry

Copyright © | Year Posted 2023




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Date: 12/23/2023 12:43:00 PM
Beautiful piece of work, sir!
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Tom Woody
Date: 12/23/2023 1:35:00 PM
Thx much. Pretty happy with this one
Date: 10/17/2023 7:55:00 AM
A captive soul ... how well many know.Beautiful and I long for Paradise, and it's heavenly bliss. Beautiful
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Tom Woody
Date: 11/12/2023 2:57:00 PM
Me too Barbara
Date: 10/15/2023 9:05:00 AM
Your words drip atmosphere. An excellent read. Cheers - Gary
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Tom Woody
Date: 11/12/2023 2:56:00 PM
Much thx Gary
Date: 10/9/2023 8:18:00 AM
Dear Tom, your English sonnet is rich with deep-reaching emotion expressed in lovely lilting meter. I adore dark sonnets and admire your poetic skill and artistry in creating this captivating piece. Congratulations for your poem's publication. Warmest wishes my friend.. ~Susan
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Tom Woody
Date: 10/9/2023 8:21:00 AM
Much thx you input means a ton to me
Date: 9/20/2023 9:09:00 AM
I enjoyed reading this, the sonnet fits perfectly with the image. -AG
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Tom Woody
Date: 9/20/2023 9:37:00 AM
Thank you. I always enjoy a well chosen supplement photo
Date: 9/4/2023 9:40:00 AM
Masterfully done to perfection. Classical in simplicity and depth of content!
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Tom Woody
Date: 9/9/2023 10:35:00 AM
Thx so much Frances
Date: 9/2/2023 6:05:00 AM
love this, Tom, and thanks for reading miine. xx
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Tom Woody
Date: 9/2/2023 6:06:00 AM
Yes, it was my pleasure
Date: 8/23/2023 8:04:00 AM
I love the alliteration throughout and the strong emotion conveyed. I can see why this masterpiece got published!
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Tom Woody
Date: 8/23/2023 9:43:00 AM
Appreciated Juliet
Date: 8/23/2023 7:31:00 AM
Tom, what a lovely, moving sonnet you have penned! Janice
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Tom Woody
Date: 8/23/2023 9:43:00 AM
Thank you Janice
Date: 8/18/2023 3:36:00 PM
Superb, Tom.
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Tom Woody
Date: 8/18/2023 3:45:00 PM
Thx Mark
Date: 8/17/2023 12:25:00 PM
Well written. Powerful! Congratulations :)
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Tom Woody
Date: 8/17/2023 12:31:00 PM
Much thx Heidi
Date: 8/15/2023 2:37:00 PM
A powerful write/picture. I enjoyed it. Have a great day.............
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Tom Woody
Date: 8/15/2023 2:45:00 PM
U2 Paula
Date: 8/15/2023 12:43:00 PM
Wow congratulations on getting published. And well you write sonnets just effortlessly. Those alliterations flow so seamlessly and the depth of this write is impeccable. “ pendulum of pain prevents my prayer” i love that! Pendulum of pain is so creative and the rhymes here used are unique! Intriguing write and reality we all see but sometimes not talk about we’ll delivered kingy
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Tom Woody
Date: 8/15/2023 12:58:00 PM
Much thanks Inky. Most of what I've posted so far is stuff you've seen before but I appreciate the generous compliment
Date: 8/14/2023 9:04:00 PM
Repentance and confession.... ! What is done cannot be undone. Still you can build on what is destroyed with saving grace. A beautiful sonnet ! Congratulations on your recognition, Tom.
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Tom Woody
Date: 8/15/2023 5:17:00 AM
Much thx Valsa for reading
Date: 8/14/2023 10:50:00 AM
Congrats on your accomplishment and recognition! - Gail
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Tom Woody
Date: 8/14/2023 10:54:00 AM
Thank you Gail
Date: 8/13/2023 11:42:00 AM
Truly superb. Cheers - Gary
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Tom Woody
Date: 8/13/2023 11:44:00 AM
Danke
Date: 8/12/2023 3:41:00 PM
A truly masterful English sonnet, dear Tom. Sonnets are one of my favorite genres of poetry.
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Tom Woody
Date: 8/12/2023 4:08:00 PM
There's Elaine. Much appreciated
Date: 8/12/2023 3:18:00 PM
To write like this requires one to analyze every word, every rhyme to the nth degree. The obsession to achieve perfection can drive you crazy - and knowing its always just out of reach can drive you mad. But, that’s what it takes. Well done Tom.
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Tom Woody
Date: 8/12/2023 3:25:00 PM
Well, now that the two masters have given their approval I can rest in peace. Much appreciated Mark
Date: 8/12/2023 2:26:00 PM
Congratulations on having this piece published. Thanks as well for your visit and comment.
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Tom Woody
Date: 8/12/2023 2:40:00 PM
Yessir
Date: 8/12/2023 11:50:00 AM
My friend, this is certainly a top notch sonnet! Great flow and superb rhyming skills. A most definite fav for me. God bless..
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Tom Woody
Date: 8/12/2023 11:55:00 AM
I know you're a sonnet lover. Thx robert
Date: 8/12/2023 10:31:00 AM
First rate, Tom. Both enjoyable and moving.
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Tom Woody
Date: 8/12/2023 11:54:00 AM
Thx Jim
Date: 8/12/2023 10:05:00 AM
Thomas, magnifique! Even down to the volta -- you nailed it! Funny, in an artistic way, I often have an issue with the word memories (which is perfect here) but some readers including myself and, as I alluded, struggle with when I include it, because of vernacular pronunciation and, consequently, have used it before as a two-syllable word as well...(mem-ries). Your use here is totally correct but to those reading, it's a nod to vernacular, which certainly plays with our perception---great write!
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Craig Cornish
Date: 8/12/2023 12:35:00 PM
So true Tom & thanks but you're your own master now & I love it! As far as pronunciations, we can use either, the syllable snobs ignore the content while praising their (im)perfection - so what's new?
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Tom Woody
Date: 8/12/2023 10:11:00 AM
Btw, same with the word prayer. It can be pronounced as one syllable or two. Either way is acceptable and allows for flexibility
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Tom Woody
Date: 8/12/2023 10:09:00 AM
I couldn't have written it without your early mentoring and example. Thx much
Date: 8/11/2023 6:06:00 PM
Indeed, a masterful opus it is. Exuding an air of exquisiteness interwoven with a touch of extraordinary artistry, unquestionably exceptional! Tom, you have crafted a sonnet that evokes a sense of melancholy, yet possesses a remarkable beauty.
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Tom Woody
Date: 8/12/2023 9:58:00 AM
It's not my favorite of my sonnets, but it seems to work reasonably well. Thx sotto
Date: 8/11/2023 5:46:00 PM
A melancholy, yet beautiful sonnet, Tom. Warmest congratulations on its publication.
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Tom Woody
Date: 8/11/2023 5:48:00 PM
Thanks Evelyn. It's one of my favorite forms
Date: 8/11/2023 4:40:00 PM
Pray not in vain! I liked your sonnet! :)
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Tom Woody
Date: 8/11/2023 4:42:00 PM
He's in too much pain even to pray for forgiveness, but maybe there's hope
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