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Abandoned Shadows

Abused and mauled by filthy loveless hands, Devoured by baseness, wickedness and shame, A victim, slave to selfish fools’ demands, With freedom kept on paranoid restrain. The mannish-child has crushed the sweetest rose, And, cheerful, tears off butterfly’s soft wings, Intent on turning beauty’s joys to woes, He’s threatened, terrified of purer things. Courageous, strong, her soul has overcome, This unclean, cowardly, and hate-filled world, ‘Though bruised and battered, bleeding, coldly numb, Her shy and tender petals have uncurled. She spreads her lovely wings and takes to flight, Abandons shadows, makes for heaven’s light. for Deb's and Cyndi's sonnet contest shakespearean sonnet

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Date: 10/16/2020 9:48:00 PM
Excellent sonnet writing, Jack. Deep, dark, and troubling but with an ending that brings spiritual hope. ~ John
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Date: 5/4/2012 5:09:00 AM
A belated congratulations on your win in the "Sonneteers" contest Jack. Love, Carol
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Date: 4/30/2012 3:24:00 AM
a bold piece that pierces the heart, jack.. congrats with huggs!.. tremendous!..:)
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Date: 4/28/2012 2:34:00 PM
Wow!! Very, very good Jack!! I absolutely enjoyed!! Congrats on your win!!... Love Diana
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Date: 4/27/2012 10:13:00 PM
This is so outstanding and like the ladies below me...I have a few fav lines...with freedom kept on paranoid restrain...(whoah!) and her shy and tender petals have uncurled..such evidence of abuse and control! A special special congrats, Jack! It seems Deb and Cyndi really know how to judge 'em! I am thrilled to have gotten to read this excellent creation of yours tonight! Your friend, Gwendolen
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Date: 4/27/2012 9:17:00 PM
lSad, lovely and empathetic. congratulations on your win, Jack. Love, Joyce
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Date: 4/27/2012 9:05:00 PM
I especially, like Debbie, loved the last two lines. Well done, Jack, and congratulations on your win. Cyndi
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Date: 4/27/2012 3:11:00 PM
Talk about taking a different path..you sure blew us both out of the water with this fine write. line 5 exquiste! and what a greatcoup de grâce in the couplet!! Congrad's on your fine verse and all the progress you have made this year in your writting! Light & Love
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Date: 4/27/2012 9:35:00 AM
Beautiful piece,Jack.nicely written. Congratulations on your win..
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Date: 4/27/2012 9:00:00 AM
Wow! Wonderful piece, and took me a couple of readings to grasp each wonderful word....Congratulations, Jack!
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Date: 4/27/2012 8:36:00 AM
Very nicely done. Congratulations.
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Date: 4/27/2012 8:00:00 AM
Jack congrats on your win...David
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Date: 4/27/2012 7:04:00 AM
Congratulations on your win Jack! This was beautiful. I loved every word ...Samia
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Date: 4/15/2012 7:40:00 PM
wow and wow again Jack.. most excellent Sonnet luv.. so expressive.. so tempting .. good luck.. see u in a day or two.. oh.. Ron will be in touch..
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Date: 4/15/2012 7:18:00 PM
wow, deep one, Jack. I am thinking it is symbolic of a woman kept as a slave for a horrible man. And in the end she dies and goes to heaven. Hope I interpreted it correctly. I think you did an incredible job with meter too. This really ought to score high on the winners' list for you!
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Date: 4/15/2012 6:41:00 PM
This is a good sonnet poem, I hope you win the contest.
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Date: 4/15/2012 6:00:00 PM
Whose the man! you know there is another sonnet called this [gasp]..how about Abandoned Shadows...??? more alluring? EXCELLENT..i should have nagged you sooner! LOL..LIGHT & Love
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Date: 4/15/2012 4:29:00 PM
It's lovely Jack... A well written and beautifully expressed one! May you continue to soar my friend!... Love Diana
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Date: 4/15/2012 1:02:00 PM
Enjoyed reading your work this afternoon..Sad what some people have to go through in life..Thanks for stopping by, and revisiting one that you had already read..Sara.Good luck in the contest, reads like winning material to me..
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Date: 4/15/2012 11:50:00 AM
Smile ˜ This Bittersweet Verse Made Myself Think About Someone Trying To Make It Through The Poetic Gauntlet Here At Soup ˜ Hahaha, Perhaps That Is What Your Precious Heart Was Alluding & Speaking Of; All The Darkness Portrayed Here; Which I Myself Have Surely Viewed; Including Your Own Words, Jack ˜ Hahaha, Just Kidding ˜ Kudos ˜ Love, John!:) ˜
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Date: 4/15/2012 11:28:00 AM
WOW!!! Do believe this one would have even Shakespeare turning over in his grave. Nice one, Jack! ~N
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