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A Winter Poem

Two men meet on the street corner by the park, the day's light just beginning to decline into evening. Their beards hang like icicles; the men are very old, but still with sparkling eyes and smiles. A few months ago they played chess in the park, on the tables now covered with snow flakes, surrounded by drifts and the eddies of the wind. One is stooped and bent, the other stands yet straight, though he too must bend as they embrace, the hug of brothers, the brotherhood closer than what the rest of the world can ever know. The city stops, the noise of traffic falls away to nothing. One of the men has a Polish name, the other is Hungarian. One has mementos of his wife, found after her death in what used to be their house, a thin gold necklace and a silver earring. The other has nothing, because nothing survived. It's been a cold winter, but not so cold as the one 73 years ago. No winter could be as cold as when they lost their wives, when they were made to work with spades in the hard ground, when they got their first and only tattoos. There used to be many more of them that came to the park. Now, there are only these two. Next year there will be only one. December 4, 2016 For Shadow Hamilton's contest - 'A Winter Poem'

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Date: 12/5/2016 1:13:00 PM
the humanistic approach lends such tenderness to a bleak winter, doug.. this is brilliant and a winner in my book.. congrats with huggs
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Doug Vinson
Date: 12/5/2016 10:01:00 PM
"Bleak winter" - Ooh I like that phrase.
Date: 12/4/2016 10:58:00 AM
A great poem Doug x
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Doug Vinson
Date: 12/5/2016 12:51:00 AM
Thanks, Wendy. : )
Date: 12/4/2016 8:26:00 AM
Hey Doug, Great write and if you do not mind. I would like offer a subject if you would like to write more on such a subject kristallnacht
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Date: 12/4/2016 8:38:00 AM
Indeed, John - very sad time in history.
Date: 12/4/2016 4:55:00 AM
many a suggestion ... beauty-laced sadness ... enjoyed reading the poem ... good luck in the contest ...
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Date: 12/4/2016 8:33:00 AM
Cheers, Probir. It was really the requirement to use the word "spades" - I felt that was the hardest one to include in a poem. A spade is not what most of us use to shovel snow.... ; )
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Doug Vinson
Date: 12/4/2016 8:27:00 AM
Thank you, Christina. I think it's easier to write about sadness. If it's about happiness or joy, it's easy to start sounding sappy, maudlin, etc.
Date: 12/4/2016 4:06:00 AM
Sad, well-presented read, Doug.
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Date: 12/4/2016 8:28:00 AM
Thank you, Christina. I think it's easier to write about sadness. If it's about happiness or joy, it's easy to start sounding sappy, maudlin, etc.
Date: 12/3/2016 11:52:00 PM
Oh Doug this is so so heartbreaking on so many levels I have a huge lump in my throat:-( Good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 12/4/2016 12:05:00 AM
Thanks, Jan. The World War II generation is nearly gone, fading fast.

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