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A Wet Day

I took a stroll on a wet November day following a track down to the byway there was a pile up causing a long delay nearby some heaps of trash left to decay rumbling sounds as I cross the tramway then down the steep hill to the walkway Into the park where I watch the children play rain soaking me through, my hair in disarray hangs down in threads, like papier-mache when I get home and dry off, I sit and watch the bay warm and cosy I drink my tea, watch the spray hit the quay a blustery day with heavy showers, I decide inside now to stay

Copyright © | Year Posted 2013




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Date: 8/28/2013 7:01:00 PM
Well executed dear Shadow. As Richard rightly said its no easy task in rhyming every line but you made a meal out of it.
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Date: 8/29/2013 4:49:00 AM
dearest M.M I can remember you telling me rhyme gets easier the more you use it my dear friend you are right I now enjoy rhyme lol ty for enjoying this Love Shadow xox smiles
Date: 8/26/2013 7:07:00 AM
You describe this so clearly and you did it in rhyme Shadow, I have a very difficult time with rhyme lol :) I sure enjoyed your beauty this afternoon. Reminded me of the rain we had last week in Cape Town :)
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Date: 8/29/2013 4:54:00 AM
Hi Wilma back in march I could not write in rhyme it is due to the encouragement M.M gave that I fought on with it. Now I enjoy using it but still have to work hard at it lol, keep trying it will come and use a good rhymer if you are stuck for a word. Glad you liked Shadow x smile
Date: 8/25/2013 6:40:00 AM
Wonderful poem. You made the rhyme flow like a meandering river. Loved it.
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Date: 8/25/2013 7:19:00 AM
ty I am first to admit that I find rhyme hard so appreciate greatly your comment Shadow x smile
Date: 8/24/2013 7:09:00 PM
Great job, not easy to rhyme every line but you made it seem effortless. Perfect flow.
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Date: 8/25/2013 7:21:00 AM
Ty so much Richard really appreciate your words Shadow x smile
Date: 8/24/2013 1:07:00 PM
Hi Linda, I like this one...It's a wet day here in Biloxi, Mississippi as I read this..Thanks for stopping by my poem earlier... Ken..
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Date: 8/25/2013 7:22:00 AM
hi Ty mix of sun and showers here perfect for rainbows

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