A Vision In My Dreams

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Peter Duggan posted a Triolet today and said it would be a challenge to do it in 8 syllables...so here's my attempt. His face, a vision in my dreams He will never belong to me Cruel fate bellows out her screams His face, a vision in my dreams I curse life for her heartless schemes Treacherous heart, please set me free His face, a vision in my dreams He will never belong to me I dare not sleep or close my eyes and risk seeing him once again I will not wake to anguished cries I dare not sleep or close my eyes My sorrow I cannot disguise Love calls him more than just a friend I dare not sleep or close my eyes and risk seeing him once again

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Gail Underwood

Date: 2/5/2016 6:25:00 PM

A really good write Lin

Lin Lane
Date: 2/5/2016 6:32:00 PM

Thank you very much, Gail ;)

White Sage

Date: 2/2/2016 3:48:00 PM

Lin...if he comes back, get a bat, close your eyes and hit his head (I hope no mistakes though) lol....that's a powerful write, well penned, you've met the challenge...fantastic you!

Lin Lane
Date: 2/2/2016 4:23:00 PM

I'm the one who left him and would never take him back. Thanks for the protective ideas thought, Sage, and for liking this one.

Steven Henderson

Date: 2/2/2016 8:16:00 AM

A powerful write to me. Peace and many blessings Lin!

Lin Lane
Date: 2/2/2016 8:21:00 AM

Thanks for the visit and your comments, Steven.

Alexis Y.

Date: 2/1/2016 11:39:00 AM

Lin, you penned a well written piece with raw emotions. I sensed the sorrow in each line. You have rose to the challenge, I have a feeling Peter will think so too. Well done- Alexis 7

Lin Lane
Date: 2/1/2016 12:09:00 PM

Thank you very much, Alexis. Nice to see you.