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A Vision

A vision of your pale features comes to mind-sight Your life eyes smile intelligence and reassurance Finger-points bloom around us—connecting light I yearn to embrace your heart and feel your love To enshroud myself in heaven’s doves Pastures and streams have led me straight to you And the last thing I want to do is turn away Scattering willowy clouds our way A lone raindrop falls from my death eye and trickles It seeps into the ground to avoid you As the waters of sustenance sift in currents Longing too for eternal bonds The lilies and sunbeams wish to shape your smile My hand lifts—stretching out shakily to you As you move ever nearer in the bright Our hands touch—fingertips electrified A surge of pain and patience running through us both It has been far too long a departure My hand no longer shakes the secret fear Lips slowly meet—forming one being Hands interlace and bodies decide You are so sure of what you do That doubt flees from my deceased view Revealing space for the only form You and I Eternity greets reality Dreams welcome fate

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  1. Date: 11/4/2012 2:25:00 PM
    of love so sweet without deceit, and passion flowing it babe...

  1. Date: 11/4/2012 9:21:00 AM
    AHH Laura, Emotions overflow in this, and though a talented writer can create these feelings one who has never held them close for real could never, no matter the talented---you indeed have both!

  1. Date: 11/2/2012 11:58:00 AM
    Laura, this vision seems to haunt you in some way. I'm glad fate meets up with all your dreams come true... xox~pd

  1. Date: 11/1/2012 4:22:00 PM

  1. Date: 11/1/2012 2:30:00 AM
    Beautiful write - Inspiring heightened senses. The intertwining of nature with emotions gives a drastic effect. Very well penned Laura!

  1. Date: 10/31/2012 8:19:00 PM
    Such an intricate write you have written...I had to read it a couple of times. :o) And you finish it off with those two lines...Eternity greets reality...Dreams welcome fate...I love them! I'm gonna have to soupmail you. :o)

  1. Date: 10/31/2012 8:08:00 PM
    ‡ I Have Viewed This Profound Exceptional Touching Inspirational Love's Verse Twice, Sweet Beautiful Laura. Not Sure Amid The Fold If It Be Myself Or Not But I Also Sense A Hue In Melancholy Somewhat ? Whatever The Case Tis A Very Heartfelt And Beautiful Painting And May Love Claim Its Place Amid Everlasting Joyfuls Eternity. Happy Halloween. My Love, Rachel *

  1. Date: 10/31/2012 7:16:00 PM
    What a very beautiful poem this is, love elizabeth