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A Stone In the Cold 4

The thicket moves, my aim must not waver; with strengthened arms I bend my bow of yew: My eyes pierce the brush, intent to savor the sights of a good hunt, an arrow true. The bracken parts, rattling, empty sighs; My draw fingers quake from the constant chill. My quarries' breath floats to the clouded sky, my own breath muffled as I track my kill. Overhead, an arrow in deadly arc speeds toward the bear I'm seeking, still as stone; A shadow moves, the arrow strikes its mark. The hand that loosed the shaft was not my own. I am a man shadowed; death comes knocking: The hunter hunted; the past comes stalking.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014




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Date: 3/18/2014 5:45:00 PM
Isn't it nice to see this one finally judged? Congrats on your win. BTW, I have asked Craig to let me know if all lines in his sonnet form need to have same syllable number or not. Haven't heard back from him yet. It should be easy to fix my lines if it is not ok to do.
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Date: 3/16/2014 9:38:00 AM
Clever piece, masterfully crafted.
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Date: 3/15/2014 10:14:00 AM
Way to go ...Congrats..Sara
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Date: 3/15/2014 8:31:00 AM
Hi, Congrats on your worthy win. I read this in eager anticipation of what was going to happen next. I could see the 'breath floats to the clouded sky' combined with 'muffled breath'. Descriptive and a very clever twist at the end. Leaving an interesting scenario to taunt the imagination. Well done Regards Theresa xx
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Date: 3/15/2014 4:57:00 AM
Very good poem with a clever twist at the end. congrats on win // paul
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Date: 3/15/2014 2:00:00 AM
Congratulations on the fine with beautiful sonnet, Isaiah
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Date: 3/15/2014 1:11:00 AM
Hi, Isaiah, , Congratulations, on your Hunt for a Sonnet Gem. Awesomely done. ~SKAT~
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Date: 2/17/2014 11:04:00 AM
superb Isaiah wonderful addition to the crown congrats on being featured hugs
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Date: 2/16/2014 6:47:00 PM
Isiah, a tall tale to be told... Well written... Verlena
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Date: 2/16/2014 2:20:00 PM
Eh . . . Turn about is fair play I'd say.
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Date: 2/14/2014 9:12:00 AM
very different Isaiah with a great twist love it Kudos hugs
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Date: 2/2/2014 9:43:00 AM
Nice poem with a surprising twist towards the end.
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Date: 1/30/2014 4:24:00 PM
Gosh, this is nifty sonnet writing!! I noticed you were one of those working on part four of the crown, right? I wish I had the time to spend over at Deb's blog, but it all looks so complex and I have so little time. I am getting scared to have to do this contest because I hate the topic of hunting and though I like your sonnet writing, I just don't like the general topic of the complete crown! Oh boy, I almost wish I didn't say I would try it. haha
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Date: 1/29/2014 4:44:00 PM
intriguing poem, well done! i very much enjoyed this...
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Date: 1/29/2014 2:41:00 PM
Wow, I was surprised at the ending. This is great...BG
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Date: 1/29/2014 1:24:00 PM
Isaiah I like this version a lot, it fits the theme very well...
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