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A Small Respite

A Small Respite ~~~ Yesterday I watched a child at play and I recalled times of joy long past of a happiness known but too fragile to last like a sweet golden dream that I fought to hold fast for a moment I was young again bright sun shone through my pain then came rain
Trois Par Huit Syllable count. 3.6.9.12.12.9.6.3. Rhyme scheme...AAB BBC CC

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Date: 6/2/2010 8:47:00 AM
Congrats Margaret on your HM in my Trois Par Huit contest... I hope to see you in my Rondel contest.....:JP]
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Date: 5/29/2010 7:41:00 PM
Margaret, I returned to this lovely one to tell you thanks for your blog comment. In this type of poem, I would say the way you arranged it makes the punctuation unimportant. Just tell me if you want me to help you with commas in your sonnets or whatever, and I will let you know where commas go. LUv, andrea
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Date: 5/29/2010 5:49:00 PM
Good luck in Jared's contest, Margaret. This is beautifully done !!
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Date: 5/29/2010 7:10:00 AM
Beautifully done, Margaret. I have written several books, poetry and otherwise, about childhood, the happiest time of my life. Fortunately, the rain has been good to me - not too many stormy times. Love, daver
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Date: 5/28/2010 2:52:00 PM
Oh, my, this one has GOT to rate high. It's awesome, Margaret! LUv, Andrea
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Date: 5/24/2010 11:09:00 AM
So much emotion packed in this poem. The rhyme works well. Well done. Best wishes in the contest. Thank you for your kind comment. Karen
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Date: 5/24/2010 7:47:00 AM
Oh my...I love this one, Margaret! What a lovely little poem...and I have had similar thoughts....just a moment that captured a glimpse of my childhood. Nicely done! ~ Carrie
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Date: 5/24/2010 3:42:00 AM
A very nice theme for Trois Par Huit. Good luck in the contest
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Date: 5/24/2010 3:12:00 AM
Good morning Margret, sweet nice, sad to your memories, i guess a happy child can do that to one,..p..d
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