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A River Alouette

~~~ Tumbling and rushing Grumbling and gushing Through reeds and over great rocks Swelling and swaying Dancing and playing Mid nettles thistles and docks But down the low glen Where moor turns to fen The river slows her fast pace And there in the mire She loses her fire Yields and abandons the race ~~~ 30/08/14

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Date: 9/15/2014 9:18:00 PM
This does have a feel of a child's song, a lovely and well done song of your words, congrats on your contest win :)
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Date: 9/15/2014 1:41:00 PM
Very beautifully done Margaret. Congratulations on your win.
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Date: 9/15/2014 1:11:00 PM
wonderful imagery Margaret congrats on your win:-) Hugs Jan xx
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Date: 9/15/2014 8:37:00 AM
Dear Margaret, the only thing this one does not have is the correct meter (on third syllable of each line) That said, it was perfect in EVERY other way. In fact, I contemplated giving it first. I just love how you took the river through its course until that last great line! Congratulations in my contest. (By the way, the meter you DID use really went well with your lines!)
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Margaret Foster
Date: 9/15/2014 9:07:00 AM
Sorry about that, guess I didn't pay enough attention to the form. Think it is a new one for me. Cheers.
Date: 9/15/2014 7:31:00 AM
Now, you should be proud..I just love this one and will look for you another list..you write beautifully. congrats. BG
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