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A Response To Your First Poem

New Year, Past Years Dawn, looking as blush as twilight, Where the silhouette of trees still lingers And envelopes me— Transporting me to my world of yesterday. I can still hear my children’s laughter; Watch them play and dance To their sweet singing tunes. How quiet the morning is now That they are grown and gone. As I look out toward the grey sea And Diamond Head I can see their faces in the rising sun. © Connie Marcum Wong January 2, 2010 Response Poem: As More Years Pass There is more beauty in my life now Than I could have ever imagined. When our last child left home And our voices seemed to echo Through our silent empty rooms I felt the sadness of a mother's Longing to be loved and needed. As my son blessed me with his son And my daughter with her daughter, Our home was once again filled With children's happy laughter and With my contented laughter too. I help my daughter raise her daughter Who reminds me every blessed day As more and more years have passed That I have saved the best for last! © Connie Marcum Wong September 29, 2015 Contest: A response to your first poem Sponsor: Silent One

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Ravindra K Kapoor

Date: 10/9/2015 11:46:00 PM

Nice to read your first Poem of 2010 with the wonderful response Poem dear friend. How wonderful to see the two different images together. A mark changed is apparent and joyfully projected by you in the second one. It’s rare joy to enjoy and to spread. With love and best wishes...Ravindra K Kapoor

Ravi Sathasivam

Date: 10/9/2015 1:49:00 AM

Beautiful poem. Enjoyed reading it. TFS

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 10/8/2015 8:03:00 AM

I enjoyed reading these gems again.

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 10/5/2015 7:54:00 AM

- Two pearls that shines beautifully, Connie ..... new and old - Good luck in the contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Tim Ryerson

Date: 10/5/2015 5:54:00 AM

I cannot BELIEVE this was your first posted poem...You had to have been writing long before you joined. Getting old ain't so bad is it? - Tim

Paul Callus

Date: 10/2/2015 4:15:00 AM

Hi Connie! As a parent and grandparent I can very much relate to both these poems. In the first one you miss the children who have flown the nest; in the second a void is filled by the presence of a beautiful granddaughter. The final two lines are so lovely and meaningful:) #7 hugs // paul

Paul Callus
Date: 10/2/2015 4:17:00 AM

Back again with congratulations...just realized that this is a winning entry!!

Skat A

Date: 10/2/2015 12:59:00 AM

Connie, Congratulations on the response to your first poem ***SKAT

Emile Pinet

Date: 10/1/2015 7:09:00 PM

Your words took stage and treated the reader to a glimpse of your heart and soul as your magic pen danced and brought to light the best of both your sad and happy thoughts. Emile.

Sara Kendrick

Date: 10/1/2015 4:16:00 PM

Interesting lines penned..Enjoyed reading today..Congrats on your win..Sara

Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 10/1/2015 5:27:00 PM

Thank you Sarah!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/1/2015 3:44:00 PM

oh connie, you did this splendidly!! I just love how your response is a continuation of life and how you have kept enjoying your life's moments. I think this is one of the best in the contest. Congrats whatever your placement was (I forgot what you told me) but anyway, you deserved a GREAT win!

Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 10/1/2015 5:19:00 PM

We both got 4th place in that contest Andrea. I am glad you liked what I did with the response. Grandchildren give you the chance to renew your life through a child's eyes which brings so much joy. Thanks my friend. I really enjoyed your entry too. Hugs, Connie

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 10/1/2015 8:23:00 AM

What a beautiful picture you have shared, congratulations.

Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 10/1/2015 5:26:00 PM

Thank you Richard. Family tops everything in my life. I appreciate your comment. Cheers, Connie

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 10/1/2015 1:36:00 AM

Wonderful poem Connie n so is the win! Big congrats!

Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 10/1/2015 5:30:00 PM

I thought it was a great contest allowing me to come full circle. I appreciate your sweet and thoughtful comment. Thank you much! Aloha, Connie

Lindsay Laurie

Date: 9/30/2015 11:05:00 PM

Hello Connie... both poems are wonderfully written. What more can I say but thank you for sharing them both - Lindsay

Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 10/1/2015 5:33:00 PM

They are both simple, but written from the heart where my family always dwells. Thank you my friend! Aloha, Connie

Robert Lindley

Date: 9/30/2015 9:50:00 PM

My friend, excellent poems both and congrats on your win!

Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 10/1/2015 5:35:00 PM

Thank you dear Robert. I am a bit behind on commenting. I entered too many contests while down with this bronchitis. I appreciate your kind comment! Hugs, Connie

Eve Roper

Date: 9/30/2015 9:46:00 PM

Connie, congrats on your win. Hugs Eve

Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 10/1/2015 5:39:00 PM

Thank you Eve. I am reading as much as my tired eyes will allow. I am a bit behind in commenting but trying to catch up. I think I entered too many contests. Hugs, Connie

Sandra Haight

Date: 9/30/2015 9:22:00 PM

Connie, wonderful touching, empty nest poem of five years ago responded by your poem that reflects present day added joys of new life and growth. Congratulations on your well-deserved win! Hugs, Sandra

Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 10/1/2015 5:37:00 PM

Thank you for reading and understanding my response. I appreciate your thoughtful comment very much. Hugs, ConnieXXOO

Kp Nunez

Date: 9/30/2015 8:11:00 PM

This touches me deeply, Connie. Loved the empty nest syndrome in first poem which was countered by the response with a happy and happy picture...Congrats and hugs!

Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 10/1/2015 5:41:00 PM

Thank you for your thoughtful sincere comment Kim. I really appreciate it. Blessings, Connie

Cecilia Macfarlane

Date: 9/30/2015 7:20:00 PM

Connie, a beautiful and touching write written from your heart...the love you express here for your children is priceless. Congrats on a fabulous write and win! Hugs

Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 10/1/2015 5:43:00 PM

Thank you for leaving such a lovely comment Cecilia. Hugs, Connie

Alexis Y.

Date: 9/30/2015 7:09:00 PM

Connie, I enjoyed reading both poems. They show how much you love your children. Great job. Congratulations on your win:-) Alexis

Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 10/1/2015 5:45:00 PM

Thank you Alexis. Being a mom tops everything in my life. I appreciate your sincere comment. Hugs, Connie

Jan Allison

Date: 9/30/2015 4:32:00 PM

two beautiful poems Connie I hope for grandchildren one day in the future they sure enrich people's lives:) congrats on your win:-) hugs jan xx

Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 10/1/2015 5:49:00 PM

I didn't think it could top being a parent, but it does. You are more patient as a grandparent. Many thanks, hugs, Connie

Miraj Raha

Date: 9/30/2015 9:51:00 AM

Enjoyed both the poems immensely,Like Charmaine I also feel the two poem helps us to see the bigger picture that God has in store for us.Excellent.

Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 9/30/2015 11:24:00 AM

I do feel blessed. I appreciate your kind comment Miraj. Thank you so much!

Robert Lindley

Date: 9/30/2015 9:27:00 AM

Both poems show the great love of a parent. The response exhibits love magnified to be from a parent that is now a grandparent. Last two verses seals it so fine my friend. A7

Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 9/30/2015 11:22:00 AM

Thank you Robert. I feel it is an honor and my delight of life to care for my little granddaughter. She makes us both so happy.Thank you for the 7 too! Cheers, Connie

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 9/30/2015 1:18:00 AM

How beautiful both poems are.. One describes the small pictiure of loss,goodbyes,memories and sadness,the othet describes the big picture,the plan of God aleays in our intetest.In this case the blessong of grandcildren, more joy, more love,more life. a fave.

Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 9/30/2015 1:50:00 AM

Oh how sweet of you Charmaine. I am over the moon crazy about my little three year old granddaughter Carissa. She brings such joy into our lives. My five yr. old grandson, sadly, I only get to see once a year as they live an ocean away. Thanks so much for the fave. Hugs, Connie xxoo