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A Poetic Twist

I feel as empty as empty can be Like a dark cloud is covering me Mind is twisted, thoughts are bent Straight from hell this poem was sent All that’s happened, happened in vein As I ramble towards going insane When two lives cross they also meet Better not try and take my seat I contemplate going back to school This used up dried out convict fool Because of fate I’ll never be a part Of the blood pumping through societies heart I’m just waiting till the day I fail And go back to live with my friends in hell Now just picture me kicking back with a great big grin As the Lord and I give this poem a little spin I feel as beautiful as beautiful can be As clear blue skies hover over me My mind is straight it’s no longer bent For the Lord has made my story heaven sent Nothing that happens, happens in vein No longer do drugs make me insane I’ll tell you “It’s my pleasure” as we meet Please be my guest and have a seat Next semester I’m going back to school Ready to prove that I’m no fool Because I do all I can I’m now a part Earning my place in societies heart With the Lord on my side I know I won’t fail For the Lord is my light guiding me away from hell Today I was pondering how much our words truly mean and how easly they can be twisted. I realized that we not only need to watch what we say but also how we say it. A simple play on words can give a message a whole new meaning. I hope all of this came out right.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2008




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Date: 10/19/2008 11:31:00 AM
This is pure excellence. Reading this poem made me realize that I need to put a positive twist on my words. I think in every negative situation we all should find a positive outlet. Thank you, for your poem truly touched my "SOUL". This poem will be shared with my children. It's definately a picker upper. God Bless you and all your thoughts. Thank you for your beautiful comments. Be blessed!!
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Date: 10/17/2008 3:04:00 PM
This is a wonderful poem. I think it's meaning is perfect.
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Date: 10/12/2008 7:39:00 AM
Your poems are as wonderfull as your name, you really had me thinking it was Robert Frost, because all your poems including this one are really beautifull, bye and thanks for commenting on mine.
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Date: 10/2/2008 9:26:00 AM
Feel sorry for those of us who haven't gone through the hell you have. Sometimes it takes that rude awakening to make you the person He wanted you to be. Some of us have had hard times but not hard enough to make us the star we could be. Hopefully you will now have that breakthrough kind of life that Joel Osteen talks about. God Bless. Going back to school? Darn, I'm kind of jealous. Go for the gusto, Michael. Vince
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Date: 9/28/2008 4:18:00 PM
hi Michael how right you are, we should all be careful of the things we say and how we say them, great write, keep the faith and fight the fight to say alive and survive, at Isiah 61 1and 2 says the spirit of the Sovereign Lord Jehovah is upon me, for the reason that Jehovah has annointed me to tel the good news to the meek one, he has sent me to bind up the brokenhearted, take care D-nyce
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Date: 9/28/2008 9:20:00 AM
So very true, it's not only what we say, but more often how we say it. Wars have been fought over imagined slights and misunderstood words. This is wonderful my friend. Well done. Regards Heidie
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Date: 9/28/2008 8:15:00 AM
Michael- It came out perfect. Your so right. God bless you for your wisdom and understanding. It says a lot about a man when he is humble. God bless you my christian brother and may God bring good fortune for his faithfull servant. Your wife and daughters must be proud of you because of who you are................
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Date: 9/27/2008 6:33:00 PM
Hi...Sweet Poem...
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Date: 9/27/2008 4:44:00 PM
Hey Michael congratulations on going back to school you could neer be a fool to me. And you shall not fail! You a wonderful talent I'd hoped you'd enter my contest ? Peace Laura :)
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Date: 9/27/2008 4:24:00 PM
Anyone who's seen someone stick a needle in his vein gets the meaning here...it's so not pretty to watch...well written Michael. and thanks for the comments on my new stuff. Your Friend, Tru
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Date: 9/27/2008 2:40:00 PM
Well for me I'm having a hard time with the spelling of vane as "vein" ... I don't think you mean the 2nd one but it is an interesting play on words. Write on, Michael ... its obviously got me thinking ... LOL ... and your first half was too scary for me to think about !! but I suppose there are folks who actually do want to go back to that way of life i.e. 3 hots and a cot ... sad ...
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Date: 9/27/2008 9:15:00 AM
a beautiful piece of poetry and well said. thank you for reading my poetry and for your kind comments, always enjoy reading your work, and well as your support of mine.
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Date: 9/27/2008 4:30:00 AM
Yes, it's crazy how words to the speaker, can be interpretted 100% different to the listener. Well done, love Kristin
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Date: 9/27/2008 3:24:00 AM
Michael I was about to panic. I was reading but not believing, then everything got much better. You reminded me of the song I wrote , "His Letter From Jail", can't wait to get it back, (my producer has it now), I will send you one....
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Date: 9/27/2008 3:13:00 AM
You really scared me in the beginning here Michael. Whew. Yes, our words are very powerful indeed. Wishing you all the luck in the world going back to school, though I know you won't need it. Thanks for your thoughtful last comment, but I don't think so! : ) Love, Shar
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Date: 9/27/2008 12:57:00 AM
Your 'on song'e5fa9 with this form Michael.Hope you com to value the cinquain form of William Soutar.Rgds Brian & thanks for your welcome comments
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