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Anacreontic Verse With canvas primed and brush in hand I stroked on colors that were not bland. A shade of blue like my love's eyes. His woolen coat, I painted red, the one he wore when he left the note. It told me what he left unsaid. He wrote to me, "I am sorry if I hurt you but this is goodbye." What a coward! I didn't cry. Instead, I painted his body yellow. What kind of fellow ends it like that? Painting finished and sent to his house. The note attached read, "This canvas is for you. I call it 'Painting of a Louse'." <><><><><><><> January 2nd, 2016 Anacreontic Verse 2 Sponsor: Edward Ebbs

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Date: 1/4/2016 3:24:00 PM
I'm not familiar with the ANACREONTIC form but I DO know this is a fine poem. Marvelous clipped phrases getting your point across beautifully! Well done Lin! Best wishes, Keith
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Lin Lane
Date: 1/4/2016 3:28:00 PM
Thank you very much, Keith. There are so many different forms to try ~ eventually I'll try more.
Date: 1/3/2016 9:58:00 AM
Wow! To some people "wow" doesn't mean much but I sincerely say the word <3
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Lin Lane
Date: 1/3/2016 10:02:00 AM
and I sincerely take your "wow" as a terrific compliment. Thanks and hugs
Date: 1/3/2016 12:06:00 AM
Very cool Lin, way to tell it like it is!
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Lin Lane
Date: 1/3/2016 4:47:00 AM
Hi, Jeannie. Thank you.
Date: 1/2/2016 7:09:00 PM
haha, I LOVE how he got painted yellow. GReat color for him. This was a very interesting way to use that form !!
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Lin Lane
Date: 1/2/2016 9:58:00 PM
Thanks...the yellow bellied coward lol I couldn't resist ~
Date: 1/2/2016 6:55:00 PM
excellent write Lin...best wishes for the contest
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Lin Lane
Date: 1/2/2016 9:56:00 PM
Thank you so much, white sage.
Date: 1/2/2016 4:36:00 PM
Great job, Lin. This is very creative, indeed. Were we to incorporate ALL the colors? I only chose one. Lovely write....great use of irony.
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 1/2/2016 4:44:00 PM
Thanks for the clarification. Good for you for using them all. It gives it that extra appeal.
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Lin Lane
Date: 1/2/2016 4:42:00 PM
Thank you, Eileen. Instructions said to use at least 1, but as a painter all 3 appealed to me.
Date: 1/2/2016 2:58:00 PM
Love it Lin lol and great rhyme too:-) good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx
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Lin Lane
Date: 1/2/2016 4:41:00 PM
Thank, Jan. I'm a rhyme junkie lol

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