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A Needle In the Carpet

*spot poetry: Written in 15 minutes or less about any random subject. Betwixt Betwined Beneath the tweed lay the nasty pin It pierced my toe without a need My foot had lost again Of all the places I should step I landed on this pain "Walkin' on pins and needles" just doesn't mean the same I merely stepped up to the lamp To read the daily news When all at once The pin, it stuck Submerged up through my shoe And yelling out obscenities I screamed these words in pain "Either I get shoes with thicker soles or ne'er read news again"

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Ronald A. Williams

Date: 8/18/2017 10:36:00 PM

Humorous, nice unique topic. Well told.

Gayle Rodd
Date: 8/19/2017 8:22:00 AM

thx for reading, Ronald

Freddie Robinson Jr.

Date: 8/17/2017 3:11:00 PM

Cool and funny poem, Gayle. I agree w/Erik ... good flow and bounce. Being a Barefoot Contessa does have its drawbacks. Splendid poem by a talented poetess. Love and more love to you and yours.

Gayle Rodd
Date: 8/17/2017 6:10:00 PM

thanks for readin' Freddie

Erik Savage

Date: 3/8/2017 9:28:00 PM

Wonderfully fun spontaneous composition. Good rhythm, it flows so well in my minds voice.

Curtis Johnson

Date: 3/8/2017 12:31:00 PM

Gayle. I tell you my friend, this is an absolutely terrific read. What strong emotions it engendered!!!

Gayle Rodd
Date: 3/8/2017 12:40:00 PM

I'm so glad you enjoyed it! Thanks for the comment

Chris Green

Date: 3/8/2017 7:43:00 AM

This was fun and I love the correlation of walking on pins and needles and sadly finding that needle in the carpet...the hard way. :) Nicely done Gayle.

Gayle Rodd
Date: 3/8/2017 12:40:00 PM

thx again Chris. It was not a pleasant experience!

Cheryl Hoffman

Date: 3/7/2017 8:29:00 PM

Enjoyed this light hearted witty walking on pins and needles poem~well done and fun (albeit painful for you) Gayle!~Che :)PS Hope your foot is ok is this is true! :)

Gayle Rodd
Date: 3/7/2017 8:33:00 PM

lol! I think this was written after a real life incident!! Thx for stoppin' by