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A Narrow Escape In the Coffee Shop

In the coffee shop A mistimed twist By the barista Caused a hissing Coffee jet to Ballista towards My sister and I Worried it would Hit her wrist and Give her a blister, But fortunately It missed her. The manager scolded The ham-fisted barista, But since no-one was scalded, He didn’t dismiss her.

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Jerry T Curtis

Date: 5/17/2014 7:58:00 PM

Alex, Only a true poet could have coffee, then write about the experience with such flare. I enjoyed this.

Alex Frankel
Date: 5/18/2014 4:15:00 PM

thanks Jerry !

Ivo Cos

Date: 5/14/2014 5:32:00 PM

Written in an awesome and all new style to me and this is great fun!!!

Alex Frankel
Date: 5/15/2014 3:04:00 AM

thanks Ivo!! there's a UK performance poet called John Hegley who is amazing at this type of rhyming

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 5/12/2014 5:15:00 PM

Alex, she's lucky she didn't scald anyone. LOL I love your internal and external rhyme in this piece. What a skill to have! Your writing style makes me think of a song by Jason Mraz called "I'm Yours." You and he could have a field day writing together! Awesome work, Carolyn

Alex Frankel
Date: 5/13/2014 3:22:00 AM

thanks so much for the really nice comment Carolyn! :) Alex

Jan Allison

Date: 5/11/2014 4:32:00 PM

wow what a clever rhyme Alex very well done. Hugs Jan xx

Alex Frankel
Date: 5/11/2014 4:54:00 PM

thanks for the nice comment Jan !