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Where the sound of the wind whistled through the cracks in the walls and the door-sills where pots collected rain beneath a leaky roof where some drops ping-ponged on the empty soup cans resting on the kitchen counter as Autumn turned to Winter seen through white ferns painted by Jack Frost during the night on the window panes where beneath, snow fell through the cracks in the walls and lay glistening on the coat the little girl slept beneath on a cot in a house that even the coal collected from the train-tracks burning in the stove couldn't warm but could leave a trail of black soot on the wall behind the stovepipe in the place the little girl lived and called home for awhile, until the next move, and the next move, and next move, to places much the same, that she also called home, where a broken turquoise robin's egg (in a glass jar), tagged along, forever bringing beauty and joy to the little girls life. grass and mud a nest from such humble beginnings yet the robin flies ____________________________________________________________

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Date: 2/21/2023 4:16:00 AM
Nice poem
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Date: 11/3/2020 3:44:00 AM
Wow!! Such thought penned. I enjoyed reading this one. The ending Haiku opens the door to the whole work. Thanks for dropping by my page. Sara
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Elaine George
Date: 11/16/2020 3:32:00 AM
Thank you for stopping by, dear Sara...and thank you for your kind comments...much appreciated. ~ Elaine
Date: 10/4/2020 5:49:00 PM
This is beautiful, Elaine. Your words describe a perfect picture for the reader. Saved to read again. Have a great night. :) Love, Angie
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Date: 10/11/2020 4:58:00 AM
Thank you for your comments, Angela...much appreciated. ~ Elaine
Date: 9/19/2020 4:53:00 AM
I have read this yet again. This time finding out who the girl is. Such reality, such a harsh young life lived.. Yet you survived, triumphed and became a gift to others with your writing. That is one of the treasures that life provides. That we may grow, find a better path and thus so shine.. A pleasure to read this fine verse again. God bless.
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Date: 9/17/2020 8:45:00 PM
Elaine, your haibun is so beautifully moving. The intimate imagery touches my heart and imagination deeply. Congratulations on your wonderful win. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
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Date: 9/16/2020 11:30:00 PM
Congrats on your wonderful win Elaine.. Great write..
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Date: 9/17/2020 1:30:00 PM
Thank you so much Jenish. Much appreciated. ~ Elaine
Date: 9/13/2020 7:29:00 PM
A new fave. I enjoy your writing. David
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Date: 9/15/2020 4:41:00 AM
Thank you so much, David.
Date: 9/6/2020 3:27:00 PM
I see this one was getting other faves, not just from me when I saw it. Maybe it's one of your most popular poems now!
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Date: 9/7/2020 6:52:00 AM
I am always surprised! Thanks, Andrea.
Date: 9/5/2020 1:39:00 PM
Impressed with with this brilliant write! A long sentence too! Such great image and the leaking roofs and the water, we have all experienced that. you are a fab poetess!!
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Date: 9/5/2020 6:05:00 PM
Thank you, Krish. This was my second attempt at writing a Haibun. I am tempted to attempt another one soon.
Date: 9/2/2020 6:52:00 PM
Wonderful Haibun.
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Date: 9/3/2020 6:10:00 AM
Thank you so much for taking the time to read my Haibun...and for your kind comments, Michael...very much appreciated.
Date: 9/1/2020 2:48:00 PM
It must be hard for children to move so much, Elaine. I bet that robin's egg brought her a lot of comfort. (They are such a beautiful color.) The senryu is fabulous too. A fave for me as well. So glad to see you here. Hugs, Carolyn
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Date: 8/31/2020 9:25:00 AM
This haibun is so outstanding Elaine. Straight into my faves. Blessings xxoo
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Date: 8/31/2020 5:56:00 PM
Thank you so much for your comments and continued support of my writing, dear Connie...It means so much to me. ~ Elaine
Date: 7/14/2020 9:35:00 PM
Your story touched my heart deeply tonight. You share your story with such vivid description, that one can't help but feel , xo
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Date: 7/15/2020 8:05:00 AM
Thank you so much for your comments, Pixie Dust.
Date: 7/7/2020 8:54:00 PM
Beautifully done and it's a very heartfelt write, Elaine. Loved this. Stay safe!
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Date: 7/8/2020 6:12:00 PM
Thank you for your kind comments, Imran...much appreciated. ~ Elaine
Date: 7/4/2020 11:57:00 AM
You pull at our heartstrings in this write Elaine, but at the same time it is such a heartwarming story - you couldn't possibly shorten this gem my friend - kudos, a sensational piece of poetry. I wrote a narrative called 'LEAVES' which I don't normally write, in fact second time in my life, but I couldn't make that a short poem either. Blessings, Jennifer.
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Date: 7/4/2020 12:00:00 PM
Thank you for stopping by, Jennifer...and for your kind comments. ~ Elaine
Date: 6/23/2020 11:31:00 AM
Wow the scenes and scenery you have captured and put to pen so awesomely, I love reading the overlooked routine details , real life and so noddable . The sooty trails of life, all so readable. Kudos!! ................. ---- ...Plz pleez do read and comment my newest piece, a prose and do also read the articles and data I have copy pasted in comment section below that poem so you will corroborate the matter further.
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Date: 6/15/2020 5:25:00 PM
I see why it would not be possible to shorten this amazing Haibun Elaine. Sometimes it is the little things that are precious to us. I can relate. Beautifully composed! I hope this is a top winner. Blessings xxoo
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Date: 6/16/2020 9:40:00 AM
Thank you dear, Connie. ~Elaine
Date: 6/14/2020 7:03:00 AM
A heartfelt write, Elaine.. Really enjoyed your superb write.. Sometimes less is more! This is a definite fav for me.. As always your talent shines, my friend.. Many blessings!
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Date: 6/15/2020 2:00:00 AM
Thank you so much, Robertina...much appreciated. ~ Elaine
Date: 6/7/2020 11:01:00 AM
Yours was no easy childhood, Elaine; yet you knew no other way of life, and most probably, like many of us of similar age, there was happiness in that simple life, even though deprived of many essential things. Like the robin you flew....a fav for me, my friend. ~ Warm regards // paul
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Date: 6/7/2020 10:57:00 PM
Thank you so much, Paul. Yes! I didn't know I was deprived...it was just the way things were. We were happy with the simple things in life. I cherish this memories. ~ Elaine
Date: 6/4/2020 9:53:00 AM
Splendid Elaine!
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Date: 6/4/2020 2:24:00 PM
Thank you, dear Frances. Elaine
Date: 6/2/2020 9:19:00 PM
WOW... LOVE THIS. It's now a favorite for me. I understand why you wanted to keep it in all it's glory in spite of not being eligible for the contest. It's such a wonderful poem. Love and prayers sent your way, Gina
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Date: 6/4/2020 6:45:00 AM
Thank you so much for your comments, dear Regina...they are very much appreciated. ~ Elaine
Date: 6/2/2020 6:33:00 AM
My friend I rate this superb creation as a ten out of ten. Such a delight to read this fine morn. A definite fav, a true gem.. God bless..
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Date: 6/2/2020 6:55:00 PM
Thank you so much for your kind comments, dear Robert.
Date: 6/1/2020 7:19:00 PM
This is so special. Too bad there was that word limit on it. you HAVE flown , a beautiful robin with nests full of poetry!
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Date: 6/2/2020 6:52:00 PM
Thank you, Andrea. This is a new poetic form for me. I must say I really like this form and will attempt to write another one at some point.
Date: 5/31/2020 1:27:00 AM
Very sad Elaine but a story told from your heart - poor little girl, she grasped onto the one thing that she could recognize that brought normality to her life. Blessings, Jennifer.
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Elaine George
Date: 6/1/2020 8:53:00 AM
Thank you for your most appreciated comments Jennifer. It is a true story...that little girl was me. Sincerely ~ Elaine
Date: 5/30/2020 1:18:00 PM
Your beautiful haibun pulled at my heartstrings, Elaine...poetry at its best! I can understand why you wouldn't want to remove a single word. I was also going to try write a poem to enter in Line's contest, but it seems near impossible to write a haibun in 40 words or less. I'm glad you were inspired to write this, going to my faves...hugs, Rhonda
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Elaine George
Date: 6/1/2020 8:51:00 AM
Thank you for your most appreciated comments,Rhonda. Sincerely ~ Elaine
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