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A Lonely Walk

Alone I walked on a littered part A companion I seek on my journey Saluting me was a weird man afar Sitting inside an abandoned caravan Looking tattered in a torn sleeveless Haaa! Haaa! Haaa! His laughter continues… He was eating from a barbaric piece of cake Hey brother! Whispered the lunatic At this point restless became my mind And then I ran into a mud shelter to hide A deep breath of relief I took and sat Resting my back on the primitive cracked wall Only to hear a strange voice echoing again Just like the sound of many water dropping I stood up but behold my legs are heavy At this time I was weak and weary I couldn’t help but to give up For the evil lurked in the darkness But when I was about to scream! Mama woke me up from sleep For I have been dreaming a dream

Copyright © | Year Posted 2016




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Date: 3/18/2016 10:34:00 PM
I enjoyed reading your poem. Glad it was just a dream.
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Date: 3/17/2016 8:41:00 AM
Greetings David. Congrats for having your piece featured in the Poetry Soup homepage!!! ;-)
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Date: 3/13/2016 10:52:00 PM
The descriptive language paints a vivid picture. I could feel the surrealism, reminding me of my own night-dreams. Beautifully written!
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Date: 3/13/2016 7:46:00 PM
Paints a nightmarish dream very well. Great imagery--mud shelter I could feel my back leaning against the cracked wall Evil exists but so glad it has a happy
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Date: 3/13/2016 12:52:00 AM
Awesome you really kept my mind going with you which made it so beautiful which is the idea. Nice
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David Adeyemo
Date: 3/13/2016 12:58:00 AM
thanks Osita do you do monologues?
Date: 3/12/2016 9:43:00 PM
WOW! New and Poem od The day, David, Welcome to Poetry Soup. It will be a delight to read and become familiar with your poems in the future. As for now, I will greet you with the same smile others passed when I first joined the soup. Wishing you and your poetry the best. I hope you get to meet all the nice poets around here STARTING with me- SKAT :-) Please drop a hello and tell me a little about yourself if you wish. I would like to be your newest poetry soup "FRIEND" Hugs* SKAT
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David Adeyemo
Date: 3/13/2016 1:00:00 AM
nice hearing from you SKAT, can we work on a project? e mail me @ africanicondave@yahoo.com
Date: 3/12/2016 12:08:00 PM
Congrats on POTD!!
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Date: 3/12/2016 9:44:00 AM
Hi David: Congratulations on a beautiful dream poem and the POTD!
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David Adeyemo
Date: 3/13/2016 1:00:00 AM
Thanks Ralph i am honored
Date: 3/12/2016 8:29:00 AM
It is always nice waking up realizing that it was just a dream, great first post and congrats on POD
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Date: 3/12/2016 7:09:00 AM
Thanks everyone i am honored that my poem is been selected as the poem of the day...
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Date: 3/12/2016 6:48:00 AM
Congratulations on your wonderful poem being selected as POTD!
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Date: 3/12/2016 6:03:00 AM
- A great poem, David - Congratulations on your p.o.t.d. !! - Welcome to Poetry soup - Best wishes and a beautiful weekend // Anne-Lise :)
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