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A Golden Interlude

The fading clamour blazing another sun has set past the urban jazz creation starts singing into the silent darkness chorus of the night drowning out the day burdens are gone between stops sound and silence bless John Beam 8/24/2011

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/29/2011 11:48:00 PM

gosh dang. WEll, I was re-reading it and I noticed line 2 had one too many syllables and line line 4 had one extra one. That is the ONLY reason a wonderful one like this would not make it. This judge is pretty strict on syllable counts. Let me know if you ever want a count. This poem was so elegant, john.

John Beam
Date: 8/30/2011 10:14:00 PM

thanks it alright with me i enjoyed writing it and glad someone else liked reading and strictly speaking senryu is not an hiaku

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/29/2011 11:45:00 PM

hey, I see her results are in. I'll go see if you made it.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/26/2011 12:46:00 PM

John, was this your personal take on your nights? (for Francine's contest?) wow, it's lovely!

John Beam
Date: 8/26/2011 1:00:00 PM

Yes, i enjoy the quite time just me and the Lord the still small voice which every one needs and thanks for your comment.