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A Few Years Back

Is that your son by his mother's side? When he calls you daddy, do you beam with pride? Are you building memories of a lifetime, Jack? You're a lot like me----------a few years back. Is that your little girl? Would you stop for a while? Been quite some time since I saw a child smile A few basic needs are all I lack You're a lot like me----------a few years back. Please talk to me. Don't pass me by. Sometimes when I'm alone I cry Got what's left of my life in an old sack You're a lot like me----------a few years back. How's your job? Are you seeing new faces? Climbing the ladder and going places. Approaching the top. You're right on track You're a lot like me----------a few years back. I bet your home is nice, on a manicured lot Now a cardboard box is all I got I had it all then I watched it crack You're a lot like me----------a few years back. My body hurts, and my hands, they shake Life is about the choices we make Freight train's coming, guess I ought to pack. You're a lot like me---------a few years back. Vince Suzadail Jr.

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Date: 10/9/2022 7:20:00 AM
Dear Vince, your profound pen speaks in the poignant voice of the homeless, a voice which is regularly dehumanized. Your gifted pen gives a potent voice to the invisible people on the streets, with intense and relatable emotions of despair, regret and loneliness; "Please talk to me. Don't pass me by. / Sometimes when I'm alone I cry." Such a powerful piece, thought-provoking and so deeply moving. The beauty of your empathy shines in this stirring and beautifully composed piece. Such an expressive and impressive first post. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
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Date: 10/11/2021 5:36:00 AM
Your start here on Soup is one great poem. Enjoyed the read.
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Date: 2/8/2013 3:39:00 PM
this is wonderful, Vince, decided to come way back to your very first poem on Soup and also I saw it won a contest and you got a lot of congratulations down here. this is a very moving one. Hope it was fiction for ya and not your own reality. Also, wanted to tell you how i enjoyed learning that you loved the sea!!
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Date: 11/5/2011 10:44:00 PM
;-) CONGRATULATIONS, ON YOUR WIN~ Have a wonderful weekend, GOD BLESS,..p.d.
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Date: 11/3/2011 4:52:00 PM
Congrats Vince on a top notch win with this superbly crafted piece on the cardboard man luv..
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Date: 11/3/2011 7:28:00 AM
Congratulations on your win in Paula's "Do You Know The Cardboard Man" contest Vince. Love, Carol
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Date: 11/3/2011 3:39:00 AM
Congratulations on the win with this lovely write, Vince
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Date: 11/2/2011 5:08:00 PM
Vince, great win..enjoyed your art..Valerie
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Date: 5/11/2011 1:42:00 PM
Excellent or even masterful, Vince. like it alot!
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Date: 2/21/2011 8:37:00 PM
I love this poem, sure speaks of how time waits for no man and how life situation's can turn around as we age. Thank you for your kind comment on my poem, " The Gift ".
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Date: 2/7/2011 9:29:00 PM
Hi Vince, it amazes me how poets can miss each other here on soup, i've here for 9 mth now, and only just caught up with you, thanks to your comment on my 'Long Winding Road' i've gone back to your first poem posted here on soup, and wow what a brilliant concept this poem is, just lveit. Harry
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Date: 9/24/2009 9:40:00 PM
excellent write...did you experience this? Light & Love
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Date: 9/21/2008 6:07:00 AM
Hi Vince, just want to say that this is wonderful, it's so true that many people who are 'losers' were once 'winners'. The last three stanzas are the best and are really superb.
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Date: 9/18/2008 4:31:00 PM
So very well written and heart wrenching. Congratulations on being featured this week. This one is a winner. Well done. Regards Heidie
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Date: 9/17/2008 8:39:00 AM
This piece is amazingly touching, Vince. Feels lyrical like a song wrung from the heart and soul. Reminds me that although we might make choices, sometimes regrets are attached. Love this. Woven together like a wide tapestry fringed by 'a few years back'. Congratulations on being featured this week! Best to you and yours....God bless! Mikki
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Date: 9/15/2008 8:33:00 AM
Vince your poetry is simply amazing - This poem pulled on every heart string that I have - congrats on being featured and God Bless
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Date: 9/15/2008 6:23:00 AM
Yikes Vince. This gave me serious chills. Powerful writing here. Congratulations on your most well deserved featured write of the week. Totally outstanding. Love, Shar
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Date: 9/14/2008 11:42:00 PM
Congrats on your deserved feature write this week.Vince Rgds Brian & thanks for your welcome comments on my postings/blogs
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Date: 9/14/2008 9:18:00 PM
This write really reminds me of one of my favorite poets, Edgar Guest. He wrote a lot in this style with the repetitive phrase. This is just awesome, Vince!! Thanks so much for all you write and your WONDERFUL humor. Congratulations on a very well-deserved selection as a feature this week. Love ya, Sue
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