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A Feather In My Cap

I looked at her across the dance floor And wanted her desperately. It was written all over my face, It made my heart skip a beat whenever she waltzed near me and I suffered in silent misery. But she was out of my league, Too classy, too darn beautiful. I turned around to walk away when she tapped on my shoulder lightly and asked, "Can I have this dance with you?" You could have knocked me down with a feather! 08/03/2014

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Date: 8/19/2014 8:04:00 PM
Enjoyable read, Abdul. Congratulations on your win.
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Date: 8/18/2014 5:25:00 AM
Very amazing take on the theme, Abdul. congrats
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Abdul Malik
Date: 8/26/2014 7:55:00 AM
Glad you liked it. Thanks.
Date: 8/18/2014 1:24:00 AM
enticed, Abdul. another applause to you!
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Abdul Malik
Date: 8/26/2014 7:52:00 AM
Thanks. You are too kind!
Date: 8/17/2014 10:18:00 PM
Abdul, Congratulations, in Andrea's sorta Shell, contest:)....Love Linda
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Date: 8/17/2014 5:35:00 PM
wonderful story hope it had a happy ending:-) a well deserved winner Hugs jan xxx
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Abdul Malik
Date: 8/26/2014 7:54:00 AM
It had a happy ending, indeed! But unfortunately...I CAN'T DANCE!
Date: 8/17/2014 5:11:00 PM
Abdul, the salivating part was kind of a turn off, but WOW, did you ever knock this out of the park for cleverness and for the use of punctuation and all those other little things I look for when judging. I just loved how you got the two different expressions for feathers into your poem. Once in the title and again at the end of your poem. Congrats on your win.
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Abdul Malik
Date: 8/26/2014 7:42:00 AM
You are right! I was mulling over it like forever and getting nowhere. So I let it stay. But, I have changed it! What do you think now?
Date: 8/17/2014 2:15:00 PM
Women like men who are endearing [I guess you figured that out! ;)] Congrad's on Your win!! Light & Love
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Abdul Malik
Date: 8/26/2014 7:51:00 AM
So true Debbie. Women ARE endearing, and you are one of them! Thanks for your kind words.
Date: 8/3/2014 10:20:00 PM
Good idea for the contest..I sure enjoyed your poem. BG
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Abdul Malik
Date: 8/5/2014 10:08:00 AM
Thanks Barbara.
Date: 8/3/2014 7:02:00 PM
Haha, I love this. Bet you were shocked. Love this, Abdul!
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Abdul Malik
Date: 8/5/2014 10:08:00 AM
Shocked I was, indeed. Floored! to be more precise. Glad you liked it. Thanks.

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