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shadowed ... the China hills like little pills set on end and stairs that wend to the moon so far from June, he thought wrought now with frustration on the ramp of the station her - taking the express in his favorite dress, Mr Mess behind (he was trying to be kind) yes ... too many y's, too many why's too many wise old Manchurian sighs he always thought with his eyes so, was easy to fool school time, Miss Farmer given an arm or a leg, (or a dimpled back, lower) on tip-toe to show her better side (what a ride) ... she was a jaded jester just her breath on the window frozen ... chosen to speak for her, cold (that chin - so sweet!) squeak, squeak, squeak tip-of-finger in the feral frost his peril cost him naught but time but there, in rhyme chilled between them on glass (he'd seen them at last) now melting, but fast in his matter, gray mad as a hatter they and the deed, defended ended ... when did he lose her? she answered with a terse curse her lips pursed to first refresh the frost so the words ... so the words would ... so the words would be CLEAR so he'd finally hear her soul speak "I! DON'T! LOVE! YOU!" written in ice crystals as nice as a pistol's business end (and to send the bullet home ... ) "But I'll always ... be your ... friend!" BAM! he crumpled onto his knees ... onto the icy platform, alone the train tenderly pulling away ... her message now freezing the cold quickly seizing his heart, abiding frosty pane hiding the two of them him ... and them ... how fitting, thought he that the phrase she'd chosen (to rub his nose in) now lingered, frozen ... frozen ... frozen ... like the day ... (darkening, quiet) like the rail, gunmetal gray (screeching, choking, smoking) like the winter-tide song of a sparrow spearing him bone-to-marrow ... (lone, the morrow) like his chill being ... fleet, fleeing like the swollen breast of March like the empty bed, set loose, his head like the blade should find her throat (hidden deep, his coat) like dreams, lost like love's cost ... like hell.

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Date: 3/23/2021 12:13:00 PM
Exquisitely done, congrats on POTD Greg. Well deserved.
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Date: 3/16/2021 10:23:00 PM
This has a lovely rhythm to it, though sad in content... strikes a chord, great poem, Greg:) keep penning beauties:)
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Date: 3/14/2021 8:48:00 AM
Wow G glad I checked this one out, has a special feel to it, I could picture Eminem rapping this one, a classic heartbreak that chills to the bone, congrats on POTD, sorry I'm so late, behind on so many things!
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Date: 3/9/2021 3:13:00 PM
So many incredible images in your heart wrenching story, Greg. Your word usage is new and fresh. Your lines flow as tears. Congratulations on your POTD.
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Date: 3/8/2021 3:58:00 PM
Congratulations on this exceptional poem being honored with POTD my friend. A most deserving choice and a free verse poem that stands out in so many ways. A fav- a true and gleaming gem too...
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Date: 3/7/2021 11:13:00 PM
Bard, lots of great wordplay and clever rhymes (loved Farmer / arm or; y's / why's / wise; lower / show her; and chosen / nose in, and your always amazing panoply of poetic imagery and emotional depth. Painfully beautiful. Congrats on POTD.
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Date: 3/7/2021 9:52:00 PM
Greg, a beautiful deep heartfelt write. Congratulations on POTD!
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Date: 3/7/2021 4:17:00 PM
A magnificent write Greg, from beginning to end it’s a mesmerising read. Congratulations on a well deserved poem of the day. Belle
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 3/7/2021 4:29:00 PM
Many kind thanks to you, Belle, I greatly appreciate the comments! Blessings to you always! :o) <3
Date: 3/7/2021 2:31:00 PM
Congratulations for this powerful POTD! Excellent :)
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 3/7/2021 4:13:00 PM
Thank you so much, Heidi! :o) <3
Date: 3/7/2021 2:02:00 PM
At first I wondered where this was going. I should have realized it was headed for a heartbreak. Lots of Poetry Coos in this mesmerizing piece Greg. Congratulations on your wonderful POTD honor! Blessings xxoo
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 3/7/2021 4:27:00 PM
That's very sweet of you, Connie, thank you so very much ... typical heartbreak for me, but not my typical form - it was fun, for a change! Blessings! :o) <3
Date: 3/7/2021 1:12:00 PM
Totally consuming. Congrats on well deservedPOTD, now also a FAV Love the style. Blessings
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Date: 3/7/2021 4:26:00 PM
That's very kind of you to say, Sally - thank you so much! Blessings! :o) <3
Date: 3/7/2021 11:30:00 AM
Greg, wow what an amazing Free Verse, so deserving of the POEM OF THE DAY honor_Constance
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 3/7/2021 4:24:00 PM
Many kind thanks to you, Constance, I'm so pleased you enjoyed my poem! Blessings! :o) <3
Date: 3/7/2021 9:34:00 AM
Gripping ink! I think I broke out a sweat just reading it. Congratulations on POTD! xomo
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Date: 3/7/2021 4:21:00 PM
LOL - Thank you very much, Mo - I so appreciate it! :o) <3
Date: 3/7/2021 7:22:00 AM
Congratulations on your p.o.t.d. win. A wonderful write. Love your lines, "like dreams, lost like love's cost ...like hell." Life with both the good and the bad. Have a blessed day writing way..................
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 3/7/2021 4:21:00 PM
Thank you very much for your kind words, Paula - blessings to you! :o) <3
Date: 3/7/2021 6:50:00 AM
Back with POTD congratulations!
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Date: 3/7/2021 4:20:00 PM
Thank you again, PS! :-)
Date: 3/7/2021 6:45:00 AM
- A powerful poem with sound ... congratulations so much on yours p.o.t.d., Gregory :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 3/7/2021 4:20:00 PM
Many kind thanks to you, Anne-Lise! :o) <3
Date: 3/7/2021 6:43:00 AM
Dear Greg, forgive me- it has been such a long time since I have read your poetic whispers. I am still here, catching up as I can. Oh my ! ! These words grip the heart so tight. "I DON'T LOVE YOU, but I'll always be your friend" That hurts, it hurts really bad, especially when you are IN LOVE with them. You have expressed this emotion so beautifully here. In such a powerful way. Congratulations Greg, on Poem of the Day. My best to you. ~ Brandy
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 3/7/2021 4:19:00 PM
Thank you so much for this kind comment, Brandy - this is not my "usual" fare, but I like to try different things from time-to-time - I'm so glad you like it! Blessings! :o) <3
Date: 3/7/2021 6:38:00 AM
Greg, congratulations on POTD!
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 3/7/2021 4:18:00 PM
Thank you, Tania! :o)
Date: 3/7/2021 5:50:00 AM
WoW! Greg, Congratulations on getting the poem of the day with this well written masterpiece. It was well deserved. Have a wonderful day:-) Alexis
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 3/7/2021 4:18:00 PM
Many kind thanks to you, Alexis - I'm pleased you like it! :o) <3
Date: 3/6/2021 5:38:00 PM
gripping and painful piece. Interesting style. That rolling rhyme is mesmerizing. Wow.
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 3/7/2021 4:17:00 PM
Thank you very much, PS - I appreciate it! :-) <3
Date: 3/6/2021 4:54:00 AM
powerful piece. Like witnessing a train-wreck. I was with you all the way. Lovely styling. Marked as fav. Thank you for a beautiful piece.
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 3/7/2021 4:12:00 PM
Thank you very much, Vernon - much appreciated! :o)

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