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A Fall Into the Deep

I stand upon the lengthy pier, It extends beyond the wave. I've come to set romance adrift, T is a love too late to save. As the seagulls soar about me With incessant mocking strain-- Indifferent to the love I've lost And will never find again. How appropriate, the misty chill That envelopes as a shroud-- To witness such a burial Of the promised and the vowed. Some mourners would be welcome here To eulogize the lost-- Some simple words of comfort For so grand and dear a cost. Thus closer to the rail, I Do approach with antique blame-- Leaning o'er the blue-green swell To forever douse the flame. And when I am alone to see This farewell to the soul-- I'll take the leap, one final time, And to the deep, I fall. M~

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Shadow Hamilton

Date: 5/9/2014 3:24:00 AM

a wealth of feelings abide within your words Mel this is excellent hugs

Mel Merrill
Date: 5/9/2014 5:01:00 AM

Thank you so very much. I always appreciate a kind word. I enjoyed reading your poems tonight. I'll be back soon :) Hugs and appreciation...mel

Sam Toil

Date: 5/1/2014 11:12:00 AM

You capture, so eloquently that moment when our mind and heart are in unison that the love is over. There is a final goodbye of the spirit that does indeed feel like "A Fall Into the Deep". I have a poem filed away that reads a lot like yours..similar rhythm, similar rhyme. Much clumsier of course than your artful metaphor. Nevertheless, you inspire me to post it. It is called "Twilight Mistress". Stay tuned! Peace...Sam

Mel Merrill
Date: 5/2/2014 1:04:00 AM

Hi Sam. Good of you to visit. As soon as I get a minute, I'll drop by and check out your poem. You've obviously been there, so I'm sure it's a very revealing poem from the heart. Peace, my friend, and come by more often :-)

Keith O.J. Hunt

Date: 5/1/2014 10:35:00 AM

Bravo Mel! great piece!

Mel Merrill
Date: 5/2/2014 1:05:00 AM

Thank you Keith, my good friend. I appreciate the visit and the thoughtful comment. I'll be dropping by soon, so put out the brews Peace :-)

Sandra Adams

Date: 4/30/2014 7:18:00 PM

wow... great images in this powerful write, at first I thought ashes were going to be spread in the ocean and then that ending added a great twist! Fantastic write!

Mel Merrill
Date: 5/1/2014 12:25:00 AM

Hi Sandra, and you may comment on my writes anytime! I'm thrilled that you appreciated the poem, the imagery and the story. And you got the ending, which is very cool. Love and hugs ~ ;-)

Tiaua M Ioane

Date: 4/30/2014 9:17:00 AM

Such a beautiful write and oh so sad! Depth and insight in this poem of yours.

Mel Merrill
Date: 4/30/2014 10:02:00 AM

Thank you for that--very much. It's a dream, of course, but it is sad, and based on a true story--probably thousands. have a wonderful day. ;-)

Casarah Nance

Date: 4/30/2014 6:45:00 AM

Wow I am impressed. I can feel it so completely. you are so well with words you amaze me.

Mel Merrill
Date: 4/30/2014 10:04:00 AM

That's amazing! Since you are my inspiration, it would figure you would feel the verse and be moved--I hope--by it. Big love and hugs. ;-)