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A Demented Clown

Drowning in a lonely and frosty lake, I pretend to struggle, I feel so fake. Holding my breath, each time I go down, distorts my face, like a demented clown. Perhaps I should surrender and give in? Allowing all of the lake's frosty water to win.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010




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Date: 3/24/2020 5:28:00 PM
Wow! The emotions! Congrats on your win, Sheol!
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Date: 3/24/2020 1:34:00 PM
Congratulations and kind wishes, Kai
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Date: 3/24/2020 1:12:00 PM
- Congratulations on your win ... great written, Sheol :) - // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 2/6/2013 2:40:00 PM
You must stay afloat...For one day will come a boat...That will pull you to shore...To walk Gods great lands,again once more. :o)
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Date: 10/11/2010 2:37:00 PM
know the feeling if i decide to surrender i'll be devoured by a desert dragon...same thing
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Date: 9/29/2010 1:29:00 PM
That is a terrible situation that you have gotten yourself into..May I throw a lifeperserver...Sara
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Date: 9/27/2010 3:42:00 PM
Now this is a poem, i wonder why one can feel traped like that. Sheol, enjoyed your poem it really has reality when one fakes and does not know when to surrender. Have a nice and cool one,..p.d.
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Date: 9/24/2010 12:41:00 PM
don't go down...keep floating/bobing holding on...it is not that bad.
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