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As jaws of hell consume our city streets Division reigns within all fifty states But hope for change within my heart still beats Perhaps in your heart, too, it resonates November ushers in a choice to make That could, in fact, restore tranquility Releasing blazing cities from their stake As embers fade, we’ll find humanity I’ve faith a new leader will take control Eliminate mistrust and speak the truth He’ll chart a path that’s sure to make us whole Restoring calm to disenchanted youth If polls are right, we’ll end our Civil War Serenity’s within our grasp once more *September 16, 2020 For John Hamilton’s “A Better Tomorrow” Sonnet contest

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Jack Horne

Date: 6/9/2021 11:57:00 AM

lovely sonnet - & so pleased the new leader is bringing about that peace

Joseph Spence Sr

Date: 12/2/2020 12:51:00 AM

This is an excellent poem, my sister of God's grace, Carolyn. I love the flow of the words and the impact of the message. The descriptive excellence is lovely. The theme great, and tenor move the piece along with much grace. Great job! https://www.goodreads.com/book/show/53812816-sincerely-speaking-spiritually.

Silent One

Date: 11/8/2020 7:43:00 AM

Hi Carolyn, I hope a better tomorrow will be coming soon for the US.. Trump going will be a big factor, however, I can see a few people not happy with this result.. Hope you are well..

John Watt

Date: 10/15/2020 9:25:00 PM

It's been a horrific year but we must never give up hope. A pointed sonnet, laced with a hope for a better future. Well done, my friend.

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 10/6/2020 7:44:00 AM

I hope your wonderful poem and poetic creativity comes to fruition Carolyn, - I hope for America, and for the rest of the world that all who see the great and intense meaning you justly explain so intensely is essential for a better tomorrow. Kudos my friend. Hugs and blessings, Jennifer.

Gordon Mcconnell

Date: 9/30/2020 1:22:00 PM

A great write Carolyn, filled with hope and prospects on a better future. Blessings, Gordon

Greg Gaul

Date: 9/29/2020 3:53:00 PM

I don't know why this didn't rank higher. The timber of your poetic voice is so stylish, accented by great grammar and meter highlighted by strategically placed commas. When read aloud, this is so smooth, no forcing. It must be the message because the technique is admirable to me. Always a pleasure to read your work.

Carolyn Devonshire
Date: 9/30/2020 10:27:00 AM

Thank you, Greg. The sponsor told me he wasn't looking for "political" poems. I really appreciate your nice comments.

Mark Koplin

Date: 9/29/2020 5:06:00 AM

Congratulations on your win Carolyn!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/28/2020 2:11:00 PM

Big Congrats to you, CArolyn. I see he did not want political. It's good just to get on the list at least!!

John Hamilton

Date: 9/28/2020 8:52:00 AM

Congrats Carolyn on placing in my contest. It is very well written, it's my mistake I should have said no political entries, so that's the only reason it didn't place higher, sorry about that!

Carolyn Devonshire
Date: 9/28/2020 12:09:00 PM

Thanks, John. I appreciate my placement. I didn't know you wanted entries that weren't political. I was just trying to think of one thing that gives me hope now and this is it.

Sigrid Ermine

Date: 9/28/2020 2:29:00 AM

Hi Carolyn. Your Sonnet is striking. Spoken with ease, with heavy truth. Incredibly applicable. I find it a very inspired beautiful poem. It's a credit to you. Massive Congratulations on its Win, should have been much higher on list.

Carolyn Devonshire
Date: 9/28/2020 12:10:00 PM

Thanks, Sigrid. John just informed me he didn't want political poems. No sweat. I enjoyed writing it.

Joanna Daniel

Date: 9/24/2020 11:29:00 PM

A dilemma right now, well written, Carolyn, keep the hopes alive:)

Harry Horsman

Date: 9/23/2020 10:11:00 PM

For your wonderful country, Carolyn, yes i can see the positives of your excellent poem, and do hope sincerely for a " Better tomorrow" for the USA, and everyone else on the planet..

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 9/16/2020 10:04:00 PM

Delightfully done sonnet even it makes me sad to see how USA is faring. ~~

Heidi Sands

Date: 9/16/2020 3:30:00 PM

We the people must unite and work for a better tomorrow. Even with a leader as president, 'we the people' can make the positive difference if we try. Well written Carolyn :)

Judy Ball

Date: 9/16/2020 3:30:00 PM

We can only pray the God will direct the voters. A fine poem with great emotion. God Bless, JB

Nette Onclaud

Date: 9/16/2020 2:30:00 PM

ohh, a powerful call to change the landscape of america, carolyn... you inspire all to discern what is best for the country...let us bring back good morals...huggs

Daniel Turner

Date: 9/16/2020 12:46:00 PM

Very good sonnet, Carolyn. I won't discuss politics but I will say neither Donald Trump nor Joe Biden is Abe Lincoln. This country needs a strong leader who can unite the country and neither of those fit the bill. However i do like the sonnet. best of luck sweet lady:)

Andrea Dietrich
Date: 9/28/2020 2:12:00 PM

I agree

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 9/16/2020 11:53:00 AM

- I think the whole world is watching the election with excitement, dear Carolyn - Without change no control - An excellent poem :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Rico Leffanta

Date: 9/16/2020 11:35:00 AM

I suspect Americans are so accustomed to outright lies they won't recognise the truth even if it slaps them in the face! but you may make some progress over the next few weeks! Aloha! Rico

Tom Cunningham

Date: 9/16/2020 11:10:00 AM

Well written Carolyn, it's heartbreaking to see whats happening in your country, I hope that a better tomorrow is coming for you all. Good luck Tom

Carolyn Devonshire
Date: 9/16/2020 11:20:00 AM

Thank you, Tom. We have to keep hope alive.

Vijay Pandit

Date: 9/16/2020 11:04:00 AM

I am with you my friend for a better tomorrow. I agree with your sentiments--it's been time for a change. You are on mark with this eloquent write, Carolyn. You don't need good luck wishes to win this contest.

Carolyn Devonshire
Date: 9/16/2020 11:21:00 AM

Thank you, Vijay. Your comments mean a lot to me.