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"5, Pentameter" Where goest thou scribe? you write and write and write but nothing right black lines words artisan like charcoal who sees the marks pentameter scorched smoking invisible in that place just so branded above the breastplate the wrist pauses the sword held aloft the thought hovers waiting to be cut in half and dropped but 5 too shallow and the grave, too deep the eyes en garde the mind like a stitch in time cast off shuffles soft shoe off this mortal coil tiger balm lit with mosquitoes to sleep separated captured eventually (LadyLabyrinth/2023)

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Date: 11/18/2023 12:05:00 PM
This song with this poem.
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Date: 11/18/2023 1:48:00 PM
:)
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Lady Labyrinth
Date: 11/18/2023 12:13:00 PM
https://youtu.be/ZKIWYddocpA?si=i7xgL35fBN607u7t
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Date: 11/18/2023 12:05:00 PM
https://genius.com/Patti-smith-group-dancing-barefoot-lyrics
Date: 11/18/2023 10:08:00 AM
In the heat of night the mosquito barely makes a sound but we know it is there by the lasting remembrance of its loving bite
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Lady Labyrinth
Date: 11/18/2023 12:17:00 PM
Australian Mosquitoes sound like a squadron of marauding bombers...
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Date: 11/18/2023 12:04:00 PM
Mortein and a retained sense of humour helps.Xx.
Date: 11/18/2023 7:33:00 AM
"Ring the bells that still can ring Forget your perfect offering There is a crack, a crack in everything That's how the light gets in" - Leonard Cohen (Anthem)
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Lady Labyrinth
Date: 11/18/2023 12:52:00 PM
"First, we take Manhattan, then we take Berlin". Leonard Cohen
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Lady Labyrinth
Date: 11/18/2023 12:03:00 PM
https://genius.com/Leonard-cohen-first-we-take-manhattan-lyrics
Date: 11/17/2023 12:22:00 PM
Another very creative write/pictures. It was fun to read. "Love" your added quotes in your comment boxes. Much to think about. Hope you are OK. Have a blessed day/weekend writing away............
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Lady Labyrinth
Date: 11/17/2023 2:58:00 PM
Clearly, like many poets/writers past and present...and in these good pages, the labyrinthine halls of PS, I am embracing the ever-blooming existential crisis. It would appear that I am in stellar company and not alone. Regards, What Fresh Hell Is This...
Date: 11/17/2023 9:04:00 AM
"The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth." Jean Cocteau .... hmmm
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Date: 11/17/2023 9:04:00 AM
"What is a poet? An unhappy person who conceals profound anguish in his heart but whose lips are so formed that as sighs and cries pass over them they sound like beautiful music." Soren Kierkegaard
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Date: 11/17/2023 9:04:00 AM
"Poetry is just the evidence of life. If your life is burning well, poetry is just the ash." Leonard Cohen
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Date: 11/17/2023 9:04:00 AM
"A poet is a nightingale, who sits in darkness and sings to cheer its own solitude with sweet sounds." Percy Bysshe Shelley
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Date: 11/17/2023 9:03:00 AM
"No poems can please for long or live that are written by water drinkers." Horace ....double hmmmmmmm (19 Crimes, Hard Chard)
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Date: 11/17/2023 9:03:00 AM
"Poetry is the art of creating imaginary gardens with real toads." Marianne Moore
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Date: 11/17/2023 9:13:00 AM
here, here sister...never a truer word spoken.
Date: 11/17/2023 9:03:00 AM
"A poet looks at the world the way a man looks at a woman." Wallace Stevens...well, not entirely p.c. but I hear you brother.
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Date: 11/17/2023 9:03:00 AM
"A poet's work is to name the unnameable, to point at frauds, to take sides, start arguments, shape the world, and stop it going to sleep." Salman Rushdie...yup
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Date: 11/17/2023 9:03:00 AM
"God is the perfect poet." Robert Browning
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Date: 11/17/2023 9:03:00 AM
"Poetry is the deification of reality." Edith Sitwell - :)
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Date: 11/17/2023 9:03:00 AM
"What fresh hell is this?" Dorothy Parker
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Lady Labyrinth
Date: 11/17/2023 9:13:00 AM
I concur.
Date: 11/17/2023 8:33:00 AM
Once again, inspiring as usual; jolting and soothing by turns... "the wrist pauses the sword held aloft the thought hovers waiting to be cut in half" (Ah, the essence of a good poem - cut and cut again!) Thank you for this moment, to sit in that sunlit chair, in a meadow filled room.
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Lady Labyrinth
Date: 11/17/2023 8:51:00 AM
I had a moment. Amongst several.
Date: 11/17/2023 8:25:00 AM
"Entangled"/Original. (Eraldo Bernocchi, Harold Budd, Robin Guthrie)
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Date: 11/17/2023 8:25:00 AM
https://youtu.be/-H7QrVKEX64?si=jEH4rXqwjgXeyyxj
Date: 11/17/2023 8:07:00 AM
"Entangled", fast (Eraldo Bernocchi cover)/Peter Noah Deleon
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Date: 11/17/2023 8:07:00 AM
https://youtu.be/DC3ZotbqqFs?si=MNjGBuMlTQDoJ8xu

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