Notes About The Poem
I had one souper that found a typo in there. I have since corrected that. Thank you all for your kind words and I'm so excited that you enjoyed my visual perception of what I found in the image.

What Lurks Within

What Lurks Within

I picture in my mind an old colonial room,
With a door to the garden where my flowers can bloom.
 
A window in the back to see the main house,
A leaky roof and the scurry of a mouse.

Mold on the floor and old bricks in the wall,
And a door in the back to the main kitchen hall.

A stack of hay to the left leading out the front door,
To the gravel path that wraps around to the front porch.

The smell of moisture in the air so damp and so cold,
I can get some water and try to scrub up the mold.

A mat by the door to clean off my boots,
I can get into the car to start my commute.

So much I can picture for this small place,
Nothing to hold back my imagination, but space.


-For Seren’s What Lurks Within Contest
Copyright © | Year Posted 2013

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Servius Avatar
September 14, 2015 at 4:22 PM
I Really Loved This Poem It Takes Me To A Peaceful Place
Nance Avatar
September 14, 2015 at 8:20 AM
Oh I was walking through your halls and enjoyed your rooms very much, This was really nice and I am glad to have read it, Grats on it being featured on the homepage this week :)
Tams The Golden Girl Avatar
April 8, 2013 at 8:32 AM
many congratulations Donald xx
Dillard Avatar
April 7, 2013 at 9:07 PM
It was clearly an open place! A nice take on the surroundings. Congratulations, RAY
Bacha Avatar
April 7, 2013 at 9:00 PM
Congratulation Donald, very nice . Terry xo
Sister Avatar
April 7, 2013 at 8:42 PM
Thanks for the peek, I want more! J
A   Avatar
April 7, 2013 at 6:15 PM
Hi Donald, some picture running through your mind. Space sounds good about now, and i'm talking about the empty feeling~ Congratulations in Seren's "what lurks within" contest. Always~ LINDA
Roberts Avatar
April 7, 2013 at 5:25 PM
hi Donald well done...Seren
Williams Avatar
April 3, 2013 at 6:21 AM
Thank you all so much, I wish I could respond to each of you individually. I am so pleased that this poem has had such a fantastic comment thread here. I appreciate each and every one of you and I want to express how much you all mean to me. It is my honor and privilege to be here and to be so respected by so many. thank you so much.
Deshpande Avatar
March 31, 2013 at 7:23 AM
Dear Donald - A nice poem I liked much -Sunil
Fleming Avatar
March 29, 2013 at 11:26 AM
Hi, Donald. Welcom to Poetry Soup. I enjoyed this poem, nice write. Looking forward to reading more of your work.
Esquire Avatar
March 29, 2013 at 2:21 AM
Dear Donald, Congratulations, May I be the first to say I can see the value of YOUR Talent. i'm old and I forgot if I commented about YOUR membership to POETRYSOUP Glad YOUR with us. With LOVE ALWAYS and FOREVER YOUR Eternal Liege...Harry
Eastman Avatar
March 28, 2013 at 10:32 AM
Enjoyed your poem here... Your style was a lot like mine.
Austin Avatar
March 28, 2013 at 5:15 AM
Welcome to Premium, Donald, to lurk about with the rest of us. LOve, daver
Tams The Golden Girl Avatar
March 28, 2013 at 3:38 AM
Nice one Donald and congrats on your lifetime membership xx
Solomon Avatar
March 28, 2013 at 3:34 AM
I like what you see in your minds eye...good work
Lubasi Wina  Avatar
March 28, 2013 at 3:21 AM
You love rhyme,you equally good at it keep it up SIR...
Kapoor Avatar
March 27, 2013 at 8:24 PM
It’s a beautiful sketch and painting of a dream place for the modern world with windows and doors opening the beauty of a dwelling so close to nature and its lofty beauty. Excellent writes Donald W with so touching last lines. My good wishes for your contest entry. With best wishes...Ravindra
Konos Avatar
March 27, 2013 at 7:58 PM
Welcome Donald! Enjoyed your poem...and best wishes in the Contest...
Cinco Avatar
March 27, 2013 at 7:45 PM
Welcome to PoetrySoup! I loved this poem of yours. Very visual but still within rhyme and beat. Hope to read more of your works!
Diva Avatar
March 27, 2013 at 7:31 PM
Love your poem, good luck and welcome!
Larrow Avatar
March 27, 2013 at 7:17 PM
Hi. I enjoyed the journey and I really like the last line. Good Luck and welcome
Mundine Avatar
March 27, 2013 at 5:58 PM
I found the format in which this poem was written to be very helpful in transporting the reader into the setting described. Such a well thought out couplet poem is a very appropriate way for our new member to debut his talent in our literary community. We are happy you have been accepted into our poetic world, Donald. We hope you enjoy your stay.
Hunter  Avatar
March 27, 2013 at 5:58 PM
I enjoyed reading this! As a very old high school English teacher, I commend you, Sir! A plus!
Williams Avatar
March 27, 2013 at 5:16 PM
i really like this poem it's good keep up the good work
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