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Written for the contest sponsored by Constance La France

 

Scars on Starry Skies

"People expect all stories of abuse to be loud and angry but they're not. Sometimes they're quiet and cruel and swept under the rug." ~ Trista Mateer
When the sky sips wild thyme, and the sun savors swells of zenith, like the sakura essence of spring, I feel beyond the blushing blues, the bruised silhouette of victimized wind, fighting the heinous heat, while barely breathing; for she did not ask the soulless predators; familiar fangs, disguised as servers of diamonds, to steal the innocence from her starry night, staining the air with bleeding grief, now the horizon sits ~ a silent spectator~ to a virtue stolen, left to ashes and dust, of heartbeats soaked in crimson tears...
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Beaufort Avatar
April 27, 2025 at 8:47 AM
IE, you describe the horizon sitting as a silent spectator to the abuse, and now we all are there watching as well. Any abuse of a person or thing is horrible...it may take a long time to recover from it, and many cannot at all. The untold truth is how many of us have been abused and the toll that has taken. It takes a lot of work to forgive and move on. Take care.
Goldsmith Avatar
April 26, 2025 at 9:09 AM
Congratulations on your win. I enjoyed reading your wonderful "Scars on Starry Skies" write with a great picture. Have a blessed day with your win.......
HAYNES Avatar
April 25, 2025 at 10:37 PM
powerful piece of writing/ sorry for being away so much but i/m juggling 3 online sources for promoting my new book/ plus Monday we go over European marketing Again, I say this was an awesome write
Maverick Avatar
April 25, 2025 at 10:37 PM
You venture into thought emotion and aftermath? Each human being different it is An imossible task to fully illustrate this journey Abuse manifests in many events.' War is a main Driver of all its manifestations dear lady.' I have Just written 'about my respect for the heros?? Its a simplifirled description..For men who were Facing many challenges..And a war that like all Wars are to be avoided with intensity.' All blessings to you.'
HAYNES Avatar
April 25, 2025 at 10:37 PM
powerful piece of writing/ sorry for being away so much but i/m juggling 3 online sources for promoting my new book/ plus Monday we go over European marketing Again, I say this was an awesome write
Rodrigues Avatar
April 25, 2025 at 7:11 AM
Emotive write! The abuser has no idea that there is a myriad of spectators!
Empress Avatar
April 25, 2025 at 7:45 AM
Thats a very appropriate comment for what im witnessing right now dear kim, its a story that is on news right now here that inspired me to write this. Thank you so much for visiting , always a pleasure hearing from you
Greenhough Avatar
April 25, 2025 at 2:04 AM
Your poem gives me a feeling of loneliness. The victim seems alone with her burden. Good luck with the contest.
Empress Avatar
April 25, 2025 at 8:18 AM
So good to see you dear hilda, thank you so very much , i bet the victims must feel very lonely. Appreciate your poetic presence
George Avatar
April 24, 2025 at 8:14 PM
"staining the air with bleeding grief, now the horizon sits ~ a silent spectator~" What depth and beauty! Heartless rogues and soul less predators are all around us. Pinching and piercing lines. Congratulations dear Empress on your first place win.
Empress Avatar
April 25, 2025 at 8:28 AM
Thank you so much dear sweet valsa! So true i agree. Appreciate your kind support always
Rolland Avatar
April 24, 2025 at 6:38 PM
wonderful poetry specially loved the verse to steal the innocence from her starry night, thanks for being creative and inspiring
Poet Avatar
April 24, 2025 at 5:35 PM
Dearest Ink, this great poetry is about loss, pain, and the abuse of innocence. It depicts the inner agony of a victim who has suffered at the hands of predatory forces, depicted by the "soulless predators." The topic also conveys ideas of nature and beauty, as well as the sharp contrast between sadness and injustice. The picture of the "bruised silhouette of victimized wind" conveys a sense of struggle against overpowering forces, emphasizing the contrast between natural beauty and human brutality. Your poem's word choice is rich and expressive, making use of sensory language to generate vivid images. "Sips wild thyme" and "sakura essence of spring" invoke nature's beauty, yet "soulless predators" and "staining the air with bleeding anguish" add darker ideas of violence and loss. Warm hugs and lots of vibes
Bordner Avatar
April 24, 2025 at 4:22 PM
Your virtue is no longer about innocence Poetess, it's about your graceful endurance. "The sun savors swells of zenith...heartbeats soaked in crimson tears." Your crimson tears are ripe proofs of vibrant life...J.A.B.
Dietrich Avatar
April 24, 2025 at 1:21 PM
I love this one. The succinctness makes it perfect. A fave.
Empress Avatar
April 25, 2025 at 8:40 AM
Thank you so much for the fave sweet andrea
Rose  Avatar
April 24, 2025 at 10:19 AM
Wow ! You express the sorrow and the loss so well, gl in the contest Ink, as usual you stand out amongst the rest with your brilliant word play :)
Liguori Avatar
April 24, 2025 at 7:52 AM
So emotional... i can't stop crying at the intense feelings of this masterpiece. Very well done!
DiMino Avatar
April 24, 2025 at 5:09 AM
"When the sky sips wild thyme, and the sun savors swells of zenith," -- Fascinating visual! "she did not ask the soulless predators;" -- Mother Nature, in general, has a mind of her own. And what if we find out some day, that the stars twinkle or mute to the dim and bright of human eyes? What then would we say of twinkly skies? Commanding possibly our own set and sunrise...? Brilliant poetry as always. Great read!
Empress Avatar
April 25, 2025 at 8:40 AM
What a most soulful comment and so true, i appreciate your kind support always dear joe
Hind Avatar
April 23, 2025 at 9:18 PM
" victimized wind, fighting the heinous heat, while barely breathing" that's raw, so felt
Daniel Avatar
April 23, 2025 at 7:40 PM
An issue well addressed in your unique style, Ink:)
Onpaper Avatar
April 23, 2025 at 1:15 PM
the bruised silhouette of victimized wind, fighting the heinous heat, while barely breathing;oh wow .. that is breathtaking! for she did not ask the soulless predators.. mmmm amen! familiar fangs, disguised as servers of diamonds, to steal the innocence from her starry night, mmm the truth behind predators.. horizon sits ~ a silent spectator~ mmmmm!!! left to ashes and dust, of heartbeats soaked in crimson tears...this piece is just breaks ur heart … it is absolutely gut wrenching
Rhymes Avatar
April 23, 2025 at 12:56 PM
It’s really disturbing what’s on the news ! I’ve been so sleepless thinking about it and you have expressed it so well . I can’t imagine what the victim must have gone through
Rhymes Avatar
April 23, 2025 at 12:52 PM
Written about a very good cause ! It’s really sad !
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