Scared and Alone

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5/28/2024 for B - Type of Forms Poetry Contest sponsored by Constance La France

"I have been a stranger in a strange land."  Bible, Exodus 2:22

Strange and shy 
Strange and scared
Scared at home
Scared at school
School is frightening
School is scary
Scary kids
Scary teachers 
Teachers might disapprove
Teachers might yell
Yell at a mistake
Yell at a false move 
Move apart
Move away
Away from trouble
Away from fear
Fear of boys
Fear of girls
Girls tease
Girls laugh
Laugh at my clothes
Laugh at my red face
Face the music
Face the big boys
Boys who fight 
Boys who strike
Strike three
Strike out
Out of range
Out of danger
Danger here
Danger there
There a landmine
There a snare
Snare a rabbit
Snare a kid 
Kid at 12 o'clock
Kid on the playground
Playground threats
Playground bullies
Bullies loom
Bullies go away
Away from people
Away and alone
Alone is safe 
Alone is lonely 
Lonely...
Safe...

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Constance La France

Date: 6/25/2024 7:09:00 AM

David, congratulations on your win in my contest, like your poem a lot, and the chosen quote, Constance

David Crandall
Date: 6/25/2024 9:15:00 AM

Thanks Constance! I'm enjoying trying out new forms in these contests.

Crystol Woods

Date: 6/9/2024 4:32:00 PM

Love this! We chose the same quote and the same form for this! I'm super jealous yours is so good lol! Jk. I can totally follow what you were dishing out and had a similar experience only from a Female perspective. Great writing David!xo

David Crandall
Date: 6/9/2024 5:42:00 PM

Haha, thanks Crystol - great minds think alike! ...and sometimes I think that way too. I guess a lot of kids must have felt this way at one time or another. Well, we've each experienced our first blitz poem!

Chetta Achara

Date: 5/28/2024 7:15:00 PM

Very well written. From experience I know the feelings of which you write.

David Crandall
Date: 5/28/2024 7:34:00 PM

Aw, thanks, Chetta - some aspects of childhood can be tough. That was definitely based on a part of my childhood experience. Luckily, I also had some more positive experiences, too.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/28/2024 3:43:00 PM

Oh yes. I remember this form now. It's kinda cool. Sure unique!

David Crandall
Date: 5/28/2024 3:44:00 PM

it's a little hard to stay on topic!