Raven - Hidden In the Mist

They took away  my Love, The day before our Marriage
Shot in the head, stacked with the dead ; in a wooden carriage
Carted off to a dank and  forlorn misty, dark Graveyard
Where a flock of  “Unkindness’ , stands Forever on Guard 

I come to this graveyard, with a loaded gun in my hand
My Love , Forever and Always, beside You, I will stand
As Juliet Loved Romeo; that’s how much I  LOVE YOU
To Die for You, my lost Love; to be living Forever with YOU

   I know how much you Loved me, for Everything I Am
                                     “ Ka-blam “
As her soul sinks into  the murky darkness, of the Graveyard mist
To rise again  as the Congress of  Unkindness fly from  a hollow abyss 

                   Inspired by the Contest “ Among the Dead “ 
                Sponsored  by “ Constance~ A Rambling POET ~

                  Author’s Note : this is not a “ Contest Entrée ”

Copyright © | Year Posted 2011



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Date: 2/10/2013 4:48:00 AM
very sad Harry, but you bring to us superb poetry,, and with it a joy to read,,,
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Date: 11/21/2011 9:57:00 PM
I love this poem! Always, Laura
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Date: 4/1/2011 2:39:00 AM
Dear Harry, If you had entered this in the contest, i twould have won FIRST PLACE. Love, Lainie
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Date: 2/17/2011 7:26:00 PM
Constance said below that she wished you could enter this in her contest. I agree with her. Your writing has great descriptiveness and rhyming.
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Date: 2/15/2011 8:35:00 PM
Very well written! Quite a tragedy the way you have expressed it. You have the power to move the heart with your words. Thanks for sharing. Caroline.
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Date: 2/15/2011 1:22:00 PM
Well, Harry I wish it was in the contest, because I think you have created here a breathtaking masterpiece, I am so pleased to have inspired you to create this stunning poem based on my inspiration picture, it is absolutely great writing, be very proud, Harry, I give it a "10" and it goes into my fav poems~~
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Date: 2/15/2011 5:57:00 AM
Maybe not an entry but a magical adventure u have penned my dear HG my silent beau.. how was your trip luv? and hope your Valentine Day was grand.. forever your "Sweetheart"..
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Date: 2/15/2011 4:47:00 AM
I am quite impressed by the interpretation of the picture's theme, HG
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