My Little Eden

My little Eden -- 
before the fall

a screened porch
in the shade of
an ancient
overarching
fig tree

small wonder
Adam and Eve
needed only one each
to hide their new
nakedness -- 

chicks in their spring nests
chirping away, feeling nurtured
and protected

oblivious to the serpent
apples not his only ripe
fooled by his appealing strutting
fruited limbs and tasty appearance,

Lucifer, the cat, a black joke of
mine, stirs in my lap only slightly -- 
he is asleep for full – while I, a rival
fig picker, finish my second cup of
coffee…

my Eden has a thousand garden poems
and their seasons, come and gone,
one would think both heaven and hell
satiated by now

the many morbid failures and bright
triumphs~ despite the thick foliage
I try to write of dappling sunlight, dabbing 
word-glistens, here and there, on my crinkly old 
face

unkempt growth bleached but yet hopeful
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George Avatar
May 7, 2024 at 9:57 PM
The first part of the poem is so vivid and beautiful set in a secluded, Arcadian backdrop- pristine and unadulterated, a real paradise similar to the one inhabited by Adam and Eve before their fall. But as we enter the second part, for me there comes ambiguity. The reference to Lucifer, your cat sleeping in your lap suggests the image of the original paradise. But I am sure your Lucifer is not capable of persuading anybody to eat the forbidden apple.... ! Lol. I must admit that I am not wise enough to make a sensible explication of your poem. However I enjoyed reading this.
DiMino Avatar
May 9, 2024 at 4:33 AM
Thank you, Valsa; for taking time to read and dissect this work. Sense is not always the answer as you say...Faith sometimes is the best resolution. No one can think like God. Blessings my friend.
Empress Avatar
May 3, 2024 at 4:38 AM
I love how creative this is, how youv mentioned serpent and lucifer wnd so much more in your eden poem, youv touched a very deep point through this write. How sometimes theres darkness even in light and vice versa! So clever how youv delivered that. I especially loved the lines “ my Eden has a thousand garden poems and their seasons, come and gone, one would think both heaven and hell satiated by now” this sums up the nuances throughout your poem and reasons why! Artistic write! Pleasure readn
DiMino Avatar
May 7, 2024 at 7:46 AM
Thank you so much, IE, for expressing your like for this work. You made my day. Your encouragement is precious. Have a beautiful writing day my friend. Blessings!
Eslinger Avatar
May 1, 2024 at 2:16 PM
Wow! And here’s why this gets my Fav-5 stars…1st, U say Little, but no, this piece paints Vast (maybe like God’s Eden, which we think of as a Place, but could have been a Planet…1st Eden, open Ended,Yours = a screened porch = closed, thus guarded, but open still to the air & found peace within… cont
DiMino Avatar
May 1, 2024 at 7:38 PM
Thank you, Sally; I can't even begin to tell you how thrilled I am for your visit today, and the fact that you took the time digest this work, and make many poignant comments. Tai Chi, Martial Arts are also parts of who I am -- probably why Cyrano is my favorite poetic character. Rodolfo, La Boheme is a close second. I am so honored by your Fav-5 stars...you have made my day!! Blessings my friend.
Eslinger Avatar
May 1, 2024 at 3:01 PM
Actually, your little Eden porch comes to be (after my research) more Tai Chi than the Yin Yang all elsewhere (ancient/young) good evil) Tai Chi concerns The Balance of oposing things…going by Dualism.Your porch, screened is a balance of closed & open…Lucifer is left confused… Bravo! More to think about here, which I love. Use a mud mask to tightn tose wrinkles, for U dappling is Fine indeed! xox sally
Eslinger Avatar
May 1, 2024 at 2:56 PM
Actually, your little Eden porch comes to be (after my research) more Tai Chi than the Yin Yang all elsewhere (ancient/young) good evil) Tai Chi concerns The Balance of oposing things…going by Dualism.Your porch, screened is a balance of closed & open…Lucifer is left confused… Bravo! More to think about here, which I love. Use a mud mask to tightn tose wrinkles, for U dappling is Fine indeed! xox sally
One Avatar
April 30, 2024 at 9:59 AM
Hey Joe.. Your poem paints a vivid and introspective portrait of a personal Eden, a sanctuary reminiscent of the mythical paradise before the fall. The imagery of the screened porch beneath the shade of an ancient fig tree evokes a sense of tranquillity and nostalgia, suggesting a place untouched by time and untouched by worldly concerns.
DiMino Avatar
May 2, 2024 at 5:12 AM
Thank you for letting me know the particulars that you like about this work. I guess, if one were to go in that direction, "a place untouched by time and untouched by worldly concerns", as Christ said, the Kingdom is already inside all of us.
Greenhough Avatar
April 29, 2024 at 5:46 PM
It sounds great. Your Eden sounds worry free. I enjoy the biblical reference and the contrasting comfortable garden surrounded home.
DiMino Avatar
May 2, 2024 at 5:14 AM
Thank you, Hilda; home is your castle -- mine is very natural, lots of soil and wild things:) Thank you my friend.
Pandit Avatar
April 29, 2024 at 5:40 PM
Your Eden is a peaceful sanctuary, my friend. Home of thousand poems amid life's beloved treasures. A solemn, reflective depiction, Joe.
DiMino Avatar
May 2, 2024 at 5:20 AM
I think, Eden, before the fall, is motivation behind all gardens...the bounty secondary. Thank you, Vijay.
Rodrigues Avatar
April 29, 2024 at 3:08 PM
Very good, especially the 6th verse… while I, a rival fig picker, finish my second cup of coffee…
DiMino Avatar
May 2, 2024 at 5:42 AM
Love my coffee! Thank you, Kim; have a great writing day!
Eslinger Avatar
May 1, 2024 at 1:57 PM
Goldsmith Avatar
April 29, 2024 at 8:53 AM
I enjoyed reading this creative write...... Have a fun day writing away..................
DiMino Avatar
April 29, 2024 at 10:05 AM
So pleased! Thank you, Paula. Grateful for you visit and positive comment. Blessings.
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