Get Your Premium Membership

My Little Eden

My little Eden -- before the fall a screened porch in the shade of an ancient overarching fig tree small wonder Adam and Eve needed only one each to hide their new nakedness -- chicks in their spring nests chirping away, feeling nurtured and protected oblivious to the serpent apples not his only ripe fooled by his appealing strutting fruited limbs and tasty appearance, Lucifer, the cat, a black joke of mine, stirs in my lap only slightly -- he is asleep for full – while I, a rival fig picker, finish my second cup of coffee… my Eden has a thousand garden poems and their seasons, come and gone, one would think both heaven and hell satiated by now the many morbid failures and bright triumphs~ despite the thick foliage I try to write of dappling sunlight, dabbing word-glistens, here and there, on my crinkly old face unkempt growth bleached but yet hopeful

Copyright © | Year Posted 2024




Post Comments

Poetrysoup is an environment of encouragement and growth so only provide specific positive comments that indicate what you appreciate about the poem.

Please Login to post a comment

Date: 5/7/2024 9:57:00 PM
The first part of the poem is so vivid and beautiful set in a secluded, Arcadian backdrop- pristine and unadulterated, a real paradise similar to the one inhabited by Adam and Eve before their fall. But as we enter the second part, for me there comes ambiguity. The reference to Lucifer, your cat sleeping in your lap suggests the image of the original paradise. But I am sure your Lucifer is not capable of persuading anybody to eat the forbidden apple.... ! Lol. I must admit that I am not wise enough to make a sensible explication of your poem. However I enjoyed reading this.
Login to Reply
Dimino Avatar
Joe Dimino
Date: 5/9/2024 4:33:00 AM
Thank you, Valsa; for taking time to read and dissect this work. Sense is not always the answer as you say...Faith sometimes is the best resolution. No one can think like God. Blessings my friend.
Date: 5/3/2024 4:38:00 AM
I love how creative this is, how youv mentioned serpent and lucifer wnd so much more in your eden poem, youv touched a very deep point through this write. How sometimes theres darkness even in light and vice versa! So clever how youv delivered that. I especially loved the lines “ my Eden has a thousand garden poems and their seasons, come and gone, one would think both heaven and hell satiated by now” this sums up the nuances throughout your poem and reasons why! Artistic write! Pleasure readn
Login to Reply
Dimino Avatar
Joe Dimino
Date: 5/7/2024 7:46:00 AM
Thank you so much, IE, for expressing your like for this work. You made my day. Your encouragement is precious. Have a beautiful writing day my friend. Blessings!
Date: 5/1/2024 2:16:00 PM
Wow! And here’s why this gets my Fav-5 stars…1st, U say Little, but no, this piece paints Vast (maybe like God’s Eden, which we think of as a Place, but could have been a Planet…1st Eden, open Ended,Yours = a screened porch = closed, thus guarded, but open still to the air & found peace within… cont
Login to Reply
Dimino Avatar
Joe Dimino
Date: 5/1/2024 7:38:00 PM
Thank you, Sally; I can't even begin to tell you how thrilled I am for your visit today, and the fact that you took the time digest this work, and make many poignant comments. Tai Chi, Martial Arts are also parts of who I am -- probably why Cyrano is my favorite poetic character. Rodolfo, La Boheme is a close second. I am so honored by your Fav-5 stars...you have made my day!! Blessings my friend.
Eslinger Avatar
Sally Eslinger
Date: 5/1/2024 3:01:00 PM
Actually, your little Eden porch comes to be (after my research) more Tai Chi than the Yin Yang all elsewhere (ancient/young) good evil) Tai Chi concerns The Balance of oposing things…going by Dualism.Your porch, screened is a balance of closed & open…Lucifer is left confused… Bravo! More to think about here, which I love. Use a mud mask to tightn tose wrinkles, for U dappling is Fine indeed! xox sally
Eslinger Avatar
Sally Eslinger
Date: 5/1/2024 2:56:00 PM
Actually, your little Eden porch comes to be (after my research) more Tai Chi than the Yin Yang all elsewhere (ancient/young) good evil) Tai Chi concerns The Balance of oposing things…going by Dualism.Your porch, screened is a balance of closed & open…Lucifer is left confused… Bravo! More to think about here, which I love. Use a mud mask to tightn tose wrinkles, for U dappling is Fine indeed! xox sally
Date: 4/30/2024 9:59:00 AM
Hey Joe.. Your poem paints a vivid and introspective portrait of a personal Eden, a sanctuary reminiscent of the mythical paradise before the fall. The imagery of the screened porch beneath the shade of an ancient fig tree evokes a sense of tranquillity and nostalgia, suggesting a place untouched by time and untouched by worldly concerns.
Login to Reply
Dimino Avatar
Joe Dimino
Date: 5/2/2024 5:12:00 AM
Thank you for letting me know the particulars that you like about this work. I guess, if one were to go in that direction, "a place untouched by time and untouched by worldly concerns", as Christ said, the Kingdom is already inside all of us.
Date: 4/29/2024 5:46:00 PM
It sounds great. Your Eden sounds worry free. I enjoy the biblical reference and the contrasting comfortable garden surrounded home.
Login to Reply
Dimino Avatar
Joe Dimino
Date: 5/2/2024 5:14:00 AM
Thank you, Hilda; home is your castle -- mine is very natural, lots of soil and wild things:) Thank you my friend.
Date: 4/29/2024 5:40:00 PM
Your Eden is a peaceful sanctuary, my friend. Home of thousand poems amid life's beloved treasures. A solemn, reflective depiction, Joe.
Login to Reply
Dimino Avatar
Joe Dimino
Date: 5/2/2024 5:20:00 AM
I think, Eden, before the fall, is motivation behind all gardens...the bounty secondary. Thank you, Vijay.
Date: 4/29/2024 5:36:00 PM
I enjoyed the feel of this poem and liked the comparisons you made between your own garden and the garden of Eden. I especially liked the positive ending that despite the thick foliage of failures and triumphs, you write of the dappling sunlight. Just lovely! And the unkempt beard was a nice touch giving us an image of who you are. Well done. Faving. Enjoy your evening, Sara
Login to Reply
Dimino Avatar
Joe Dimino
Date: 5/2/2024 5:28:00 AM
I should shave more often...like my garden, unkempt -- but the birds and other critters I relate closely with in my heart, seem far more comfortable and at home with less fuss and trimming. Blessing my friend. Your Fav is precious!
Date: 4/29/2024 3:08:00 PM
Very good, especially the 6th verse… while I, a rival fig picker, finish my second cup of coffee…
Login to Reply
Dimino Avatar
Joe Dimino
Date: 5/2/2024 5:42:00 AM
Love my coffee! Thank you, Kim; have a great writing day!
Eslinger Avatar
Sally Eslinger
Date: 5/1/2024 1:57:00 PM
Date: 4/29/2024 8:53:00 AM
I enjoyed reading this creative write...... Have a fun day writing away..................
Login to Reply
Dimino Avatar
Joe Dimino
Date: 4/29/2024 10:05:00 AM
So pleased! Thank you, Paula. Grateful for you visit and positive comment. Blessings.

Book: Shattered Sighs