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Love In a Far Off Place- For Contest

We'd made a dawn start that day, following in his footsteps, as apparently Jesus used to get up early. Our group had gathered for a reading, and to pray, along with fruit and cereals our first staples of the day. The good Lord had gifted us a painted morning of Coeruleum blue, and a warm spiced breeze flossed my smile. I turned and watched the city for a while. Amidst the pink and beige jigsaw of the old city, the Dome of the rock had caught the morning rays and was now bragging about it, shamelessly blinging, competing with the shouts of Minarets and Church bells ringing. Few things can compete with an Israel morning, but you did. Perched like an Owl on a low wall, cross-legged, your head moved from side to side, scanning the mount, sharing our glass, drinking the moment. You wore white cotton, an arm hung with beads, an evil eye bracelet and what looked like a Kara, glistening. Styled by the Gods, with three quarters of a straw hat wedged in the bricks. And then I found myself before you, Lord knows how, and I was trying to remember how my mouth worked. Your head cocked to one side you watched me for a while then nodded me a soft hello, and finished with a smile. Ice broken, we gathered intelligence- you, a 'gap year Guerilla' on a global reconnaissance , armed with just a shoulder bag and a credit card. Me, a lapsed Catholic with an empty soul, seeking a childhood faith long discarded. A shout from the tour guide burst our intimate bubble and I retreated, backwards, gesturing, as if in the presence of a Shah. She waved back, almost lost her balance, and a gust of wind would have placed her gently among the sleeping of the Kidron if she hadn't grabbed her hat. And that was that. I went back to the wall that evening, and the following morning, I don't know why- she'd be bathed in the rose of Petra by then. For a short time I was bereft, and stood, fittingly, before the Basilica of the Agony, and then sat on our wall, to watch the chosen wake up. I think my soul woke a little, just then. For God had left me with a little bit of love. Unrequited, but worth hanging on to , worth building on. It's been thirty five years, and in those occasional quiet places I still think of you For contest 'Love in a far off place', sponsored by Frank Herrera 22nd July 2015

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Date: 7/29/2015 10:13:00 AM
Congrats to your WIN Viv! A very wonderful piece indeed! ;-)
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Viv Wigley
Date: 7/29/2015 12:07:00 PM
Thanks, Teddy, nice to share a wistful memory with folk. Regards, Viv
Date: 7/27/2015 10:59:00 PM
What a great journey I just had and a very good read...You have a great way of using your words-I don't know you and yet while I was reading them, I hear this voice, loud and clear while I know for a fact, it wasn't mine. Congrats, it's very well desrved
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Date: 7/27/2015 11:47:00 PM
Cheers, Wilbert, sometimes the content and my style get on well together. Regards, Viv
Date: 7/27/2015 10:46:00 PM
Awesome pen Viv! Powerful words n wonderful expressions!Big congrats on ur top podium!
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Date: 7/27/2015 11:46:00 PM
Thanks, Dr Upma, I enjoyed the reminisce. Viv x
Date: 7/27/2015 10:00:00 PM
Viv, congratulation on your great win:-) Alexis
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Date: 7/27/2015 10:31:00 PM
Thanks Alexis, a great topic for the contest and it shows- the other entries are absolute belters. Viv x
Date: 7/27/2015 9:50:00 PM
Wow, I felt like I was there with you as I read this beautifully romantic encounter! Congrats on your well deserved win, Viv...the poem is more intriguing knowing that it's true. Hugs, Rhonda
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Date: 7/27/2015 10:30:00 PM
A treasured memory, Rhonda, right place, right time, wrong girl, apparently. I suppose it's like we see thousands of birds in the sky each day, but you never forget the brief flash of a Kingfisher. Thanks, Viv x
Date: 7/27/2015 8:10:00 PM
Dropping back with my congrats Mr Viv:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 7/27/2015 9:08:00 PM
Thanks, Jan, maybe that Kate Bush lookalike it's about is out there, reading it. Then again, maybe not. Some moments are best left alone. Viv x
Date: 7/27/2015 5:21:00 PM
Great unique expressions Viv. They weave a story that pulls the reader in. Great work here. Congrats.
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Date: 7/27/2015 9:08:00 PM
Thanks James, much appreciated. Regards, Viv
Date: 7/27/2015 5:17:00 PM
Viv, a beautifully descriptive write! Not just descriptive but uniquely descriptive. I enjoyed reading this very much! Congrats on your win! Love, Kim
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Date: 7/27/2015 9:09:00 PM
Thanks, Kim, that's very kind of you. Oh well, back to the hum-drum I go..... :) Viv x
Date: 7/27/2015 3:51:00 PM
Congratulations Viv: Words flow without effort into your stories. Never disappointed by your work. Hugs, SuZ
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Date: 7/27/2015 9:11:00 PM
Thanks Suzy, I aim to please- normally miss:). Viv x
Date: 7/27/2015 12:21:00 PM
Viv,, Congratulations on the win. SKAT
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Date: 7/27/2015 1:01:00 PM
Thanks Skat, a lovely theme with lovely results all round. Viv x
Date: 7/27/2015 11:48:00 AM
Viv,beautiful descriptive write a 7, congratulations on you win. Hugs Eve
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Date: 7/27/2015 1:03:00 PM
Thanks, Eve, based on a real encounter I had. Excuse me while I go and get a handkerchief....sniff..... Viv x
Date: 7/22/2015 9:54:00 PM
Viv, what an incredible writer your are, you poem is totally wonderful, 10 ++++, I was captivated by it, best of luck in the contest but it is a winner for sure and thanks for visiting my muse poem
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Date: 7/22/2015 11:35:00 PM
Thanks, BW, nice of you to say so, and don't forget to exercise your Muse- you don't want poetic arthritis now, do you? Viv x
Date: 7/22/2015 7:10:00 PM
G'day Viv... what a great story, and you took me with you on your journey - just brilliant Viv - Lindsay
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Date: 7/22/2015 8:18:00 PM
Thanks, Lindsay, I'll take that as a huge complement from the master storyteller of Longwarry. Regards, Viv
Date: 7/22/2015 4:49:00 PM
You captured the moment beautifully. Everybody, I believe, have this kind of moment in their lives where they tend to revisit time and again whenever they feel sad or a strong sense of longing. Nicely done.
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Date: 7/22/2015 8:15:00 PM
Thanks, Abdul, we are complex people, and hoard things in our hearts that sometimes to others seem pointless, but we simply won't let go of. Thanks for stopping by. Regards, Viv
Date: 7/22/2015 9:58:00 AM
This is an amazing piece of work Viv, i know Frank will love this, in fact could it carry on, reads so interesting?
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Date: 7/22/2015 12:15:00 PM
I wish, since it actually happened, that it could carry on, Harry, but our brief rendezvous was just that, which surpisingly is one of the strongest recollections I have, including past relationships that lasted much longer. Still, very grateful for that fleeting love at first sight smitten feeling. Gives me goosebumps even now. Thanks for the comment, and for stopping by. Regards, Viv
Date: 7/22/2015 7:08:00 AM
Reading that it is an actual memory adds to the experience.
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Date: 7/22/2015 7:07:00 AM
This is very well expressed Viv, I thoroughly enjoyed the story.
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Date: 7/22/2015 7:41:00 AM
Thanks, Richard, some memories remain firmly ensconced despite the years. Regards, Viv
Date: 7/22/2015 4:41:00 AM
wow what a story Mr Viv - good luck in the contest:-) hugs jan xx
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Date: 7/22/2015 5:58:00 AM
A Manx thanx, Jan, seems like only yesterday. Viv x
Date: 7/22/2015 3:06:00 AM
- A delightful story full of beautiful colors and love, Viv - A poem that will top any contest list ~ best of luck ! - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 7/22/2015 4:25:00 AM
Thanks, Anne Lise, you're very kind. I sat up at three o'clock this morning and basically typed out my memory of that day, with very little editing, so I suppose it qualifies as free verse. Viv x

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