Ink Empress Poet Quatern

Hurts the most

“What hurts the most was being close,”
remembering us as we were,
though I'm not feeling the sage moon,
nor pearl raindrops that kissed my soul.

Now I waltz to tuneless songs as~
what hurts the most was being close,
while failing syllables of love,
and “I can't find the words”to rhyme.

Maybe,”I couldn't make you see it,”
how stars in my eyes sang your name. 
What hurts the most was being close,
but, drowning in your lake of lies. 

“Your heart was glass, I dropped it,” so
here I swirl beneath skies of tears
forlorn memories and I, as 
what hurts the most was being close. 


Songs used;
1- what hurts the most was being close ~ Rascal Flatts, what hurts the most 
2-  but I cant find the words ~ Lady GaGa , remember us this way 
3- I Couldn’t make you see it ~ Lifehouse, Blind 
4- Your heart was glass, I dropped it ~ Taylor Swift, Champagne problems

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Christina Bowring March 24, 2024 at 2:34 AM Dearest Inky, this is so achingly beautiful and so poignantly sad. The emotion, so raw, is powerfully expressed and you have incorporated the song lines flawlessly into the poem. ‘ nor pearl raindrops that kissed my soul’ ‘ how stars in my eyes sang your name’ really stood out for me and this will resonate with so many. I love it when you do another form as you have so skilfully mastered them all. Loved this dear one. Always an admirer xx :):)

Joseph May February 11, 2024 at 4:50 AM Wonderful write Empress, Congrats on your win

Tonye George February 8, 2024 at 1:39 PM "how stars in my eyes sang your name. What hurts the most was being close" This line shows vastly, the imagery of the pure love you had. Truly, being close to someone and having to never see them again when they go back to being strangers is something I wish we could forget.

Valsa George February 4, 2024 at 9:04 PM Yesterday I wrote a comment to your beautiful heart touching poem . When I was about to post it, my connection got interrupted. It really disappoints me. We feel most hurt and pained when we are betrayed by someone who has been held so close to our heart ! Your first line though not yours has been aptly chosen to express your heart's aches and it fits so well. In fact all the four lines from the songs blend so well that it has finally become a heart wrenching lament.“Your heart was glass, I dropped it,” so here I swirl beneath skies of tears" I feel as if the splinters are piercing into my heart. Dear Empress.... the articulated pain in this poem deeply touches me. Into my FAVE. b/w. Physically I am not so well these days. Hope things will improve..

Paul Bell February 4, 2024 at 3:49 AM Aren't words so exiting. Everyone remembers some part of a verse from songs sung. Always loved the beatles, ''it's a hard days night'' Sums up most days.

Stephan McBride February 3, 2024 at 3:59 PM Beautiful poem to bring this together from all these songs, your achievements are limitless: )

Duke Beaufort February 3, 2024 at 9:46 AM It's always interesting to see poems about hurt and its various descriptions. I am impressed how you used the song lyrics and how you worked them in. Relationships are often difficult and poems like this make me look back at relationships early in my life where I was like a bull in a china shop. I wish I could apologize to people I hurt. When we age, we hope we can act better based on what we learned about hurt while young and inexperienced.

Sara Kendrick February 3, 2024 at 6:56 AM Creative lines penned with the use of the song lines. Thanks for sharing this contest entry with us. It reads like a good contender to me. Way to go. Your visit to my page was encouraging. Sara K

Yann Rolland February 3, 2024 at 12:21 AM nice composition, don't know all the verses but it is thoughtful, enjoyed your inspiration poet, God bless you Ink Empress February 3, 2024 at 3:17 AM Thank you so very much

Hilda Greenhough February 2, 2024 at 3:15 PM What a wonderful poem taken from songs. I liked it immensely. I think I'm smiling joy. Ink Empress February 3, 2024 at 3:17 AM Ah thank you so much dear hilda so very much

Victor Buhagiar February 2, 2024 at 8:55 AM Dear Ink, lost love is a popular subject and considering the contest, you did very well. Wishing you top place. Hugs Ink Empress February 3, 2024 at 3:11 AM Thank you so much dear victor

Hiya Sharma February 2, 2024 at 12:29 AM Oh gosh, my dear fairy goddess, what a impeccably heartfelt poem you've knitted here with such eloquent artistry of words.I'm in sheer awe of your creativity. The emotions infused in your lines really hit hard as having seen betrayals and hearts drifting away,I could resonate with those feelings to the core. Harsh but unfortunately true, people closest to us, hurt the most! This write stirred my soul and also, those songs which you've used ahh,I absolutely love them.That last stanza was poignant Ink Empress February 3, 2024 at 3:02 AM Ah thank you so much. I am so glad you also like the songs angelic star im grateful always for your generous and detailed comments truly . Hiya Sharma February 2, 2024 at 1:47 AM You've absolutely nailed this and I loved reading it.. Brilliant wordplay and phraseology throughout with palpable depth. Wishing you the best of luck for the contest, sending so much love & light.

Daniel Henry Rodgers February 1, 2024 at 5:24 PM Hey Ink Empress, You have really demonstrated the ache of lost connections and unspoken emotions. The intertwining of song lyrics adds layers of melancholy and longing to the verses. It’s like a lyrical journey through heartbreak and introspection. Keep pouring your soul onto the pages! Because I am a fan! - Blessings, Daniel Ink Empress February 3, 2024 at 2:51 AM Ah thank you so very much for your generous and kind support dear daniel im truly grateful

Paige Hind February 1, 2024 at 5:10 PM However much pain this entails, it's beauitiful, and this is an excellent choice of songs put together. <3 Ink Empress February 3, 2024 at 2:44 AM Awn thank you so much always

Bill Baker February 1, 2024 at 4:49 PM Very creative poetry, Inky. Things for making poetry fun for me today! Love and light my friend. Bill Ink Empress February 3, 2024 at 2:41 AM Ah thank you so much dear bill

Andrea Dietrich February 1, 2024 at 2:35 PM Oh wow you did from different artists and I really like the dark theme you wrote so brilliantly Ink Empress February 3, 2024 at 2:36 AM Thank you so very much dear andrea im grateful for your kind and generous support

Vijay Pandit February 1, 2024 at 1:53 PM Though the lines are from different songs they all dwell at the edge of realms forlorn. How wonderfully you have woven these lines into a seamless presentation, my friend. Your poem speaks to angst of hearts brilliantly! Ink Empress February 3, 2024 at 2:35 AM Thank you so very much dear vijay: im truly grateful for your support

Frederic Parker February 1, 2024 at 12:26 PM what hurts the most is not seeing the seeds of betrayal before they grow Ink Empress February 3, 2024 at 2:34 AM Ah thats so deep of you to say dear frederick thank you so much for your visit and encouraging words

Anne-Lise Andresen February 1, 2024 at 11:35 AM - “What hurts the most was being close” a line that says more than a thousand words ... wooow it hit me with a bang ... - A beautiful and deeply sad poem, Ink :) - hugs Ink Empress February 3, 2024 at 2:31 AM Thank you so much dear anne lise for your kind and sincere comment

Silent One February 1, 2024 at 11:01 AM I see you used four different songs and artists to express your poem and its a very good take on the contest.. It does seem sad and it stinks of betrayal... no one hurts you like the ones you love the most and that is the biggest betrayal.. People drift away, especially friends we once knew... Rumi said it best though, people in this world dont look at themselves, so blame one another.. Best of luck in the contest dear.. Ink Empress February 1, 2024 at 11:14 AM Well your comment just made me cry sigh this is so touching thank you guess sometimes we need to cry

Fading Star Silence February 1, 2024 at 10:55 AM Woooow! This one gave me the chills! How deep and raw this hauntingly beautiful piece is! So full of melancholy and the ghosts of past that so many could resonate on a deeper level with! We all go through a form of change and sometimes change is miserable and you’ve so flawlessly expressed this here! This is truly one of my new faves that hit me deep in my soul..for one who hates change..me. Haha! I’m truly mesmerized by this exquisite piece, my beautiful soul sis! You’ve done it again! Ink Empress February 1, 2024 at 11:15 AM Awwn i appreciate you so much truly! Sigh!

Lioness Onpaper February 1, 2024 at 10:43 AM What hurts the most was being close,… aaaah definitely not me aeee papi!!! HARAAAAM if u say me!!! pearl raindrops that kissed my soul... mmmmm.. there u go making my heart skip a beat for your lines!!! how stars in my eyes sang your name... omg u tooo??? Mine toooo !!! Whn I close my eyes , I hear a weezing whisper,it goes “ kundhaliniiiiii!!!! ” XD!! here I swirl beneath skies of tears.., damn ur words r majestic aeee!! Ink Empress February 1, 2024 at 11:15 AM Lol thanks papi

The Aura Rhymes February 1, 2024 at 10:37 AM Man I really love this … Ink Empress February 1, 2024 at 11:16 AM Lol