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I relax in the shade of the whitewashed porch as my gnarled hands caress the arms of the creaking rocking chair - it was my late Gran’s favorite possession I’ve been fortunate to be able to lease her cottage the temperate climate here boosts my spirits My once rosy complexion is pallid - the doctor says my time is running out ... soon I’ll be at eternal peace in heaven I’m constantly tired ... even the simplest chores exhaust me I’ve neglected the cottage garden it pains me to see the sweet honeysuckle left untrimmed and straggly yet, I wait patiently for its gold buds to burst open releasing its stunning scent on the zephyr breeze Required words :- temperate, buds, lease, possession, heaven, complexion, eternal, gold, untrimmed, shade. A Summer's Day Redo Poetry Contest Sponsored by Michelle Faulkner 8/12/19

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Date: 8/30/2019 6:12:00 PM
Here is a real beauty I had somehow missed of yours, Jan . Congrats for your win. Five more comments and I am finally going to get to my kitchen.
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Date: 8/30/2019 2:50:00 AM
Congratulations on your win Jan. I knew this would be on the winner's list! xxoo
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Date: 8/30/2019 12:11:00 AM
I love this poem Jan - it has depth, sadness, yet written with a great love and appreciation of nature. Well done Jan, Congratulations and hugs. Jennifer.
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Date: 8/29/2019 3:12:00 PM
You have written such a touching story, Jan, congratulations, thanks for entering my contest!
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Date: 8/17/2019 9:17:00 AM
I was shocked to see that some of these were required words; they were brought in effortlessly. No dragging at all.
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Date: 8/14/2019 3:11:00 PM
Jan, you fit the required words in so seamlessly I had to hunt for them. This is a very beautiful entry that I'm sure will be awarded. Lovely! : ) xxoo
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Date: 8/14/2019 12:22:00 PM
Jan what an emotional write and so beautifully penned, well done !
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Date: 8/14/2019 1:23:00 AM
Hello Jan … I really did enjoy your verse Jan. The resignation that life may be ebbing so the beauty of the honeysuckle stands out even more - thank you Jan - Lindsay
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Date: 8/13/2019 3:31:00 PM
Nice write Jan, excellent penning indeed. Amazing the inspiration a spiritual car park can bring!
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Date: 8/13/2019 7:27:00 AM
So well done, Jan. Beautifully written. Best of luck in the contest. Hugs // Charlie xx
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Date: 8/12/2019 9:43:00 PM
"Vintage Jan!" -- but you didn't fool me this time for some reason. Most enjoyable, especially knowing that it's fiction! Nice entry for the contest. See you in the winner's circle! :) gw
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Date: 8/12/2019 8:21:00 PM
Sounds like you are approaching the autumn of life. You show clearly how we must savor the beauty of nature in the short time we are granted. Good luck in the contest! Peace & Love Matthew Anish
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Date: 8/12/2019 2:29:00 PM
An old person looking back on what could be their final summer days. A very touching verse Jan. Good luck. Tom
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Date: 8/12/2019 5:23:00 PM
Thanks Tom, I started this poem in a church car park on Friday and finally got it finished today:-) hugs Jan xx
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