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Trimeric Contest by Janice Canerdy ~ September 1, 2024

The world still sleeps at dawn's first blush when trilling birds tickle my ear. I welcome the dirge of a thrush as sunlight's tepid breath draws near. When trilling birds tickle my ear and morning skies are pastel pink, I dip my feathered quill in ink. I welcome the dirge of a thrush helping his mate to build a nest. It's the time of day I like best. As sunlight's tepid breath draws near, I've written a verse of Haiku of rose petals dripping with dew.

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Paul Callus

Date: 9/5/2024 1:28:00 PM

Congratulations on your fine win, Lin. Both title and content appealed to me. Best regards // paul

Lin Lane
Date: 9/5/2024 2:18:00 PM

Thank you ever so much for leaving your thoughts, Paul. I'm hoping everything is fine in your world.

Crystol Woods

Date: 9/4/2024 8:53:00 AM

Wow... just wow... I'm in love with this poetic form! Everyone I've read is absinthe and you have written another awesome poem here! I no longer have the words to express my admiration! Xo

Lin Lane
Date: 9/5/2024 2:17:00 PM

Thank you for your thoughtful review, Crystol.

Karen Jones

Date: 9/3/2024 10:07:00 PM

Congratulations on yet another win! Yay

Lin Lane
Date: 9/5/2024 2:17:00 PM

Thanks so kindly, Karen.

Jay Narain

Date: 9/3/2024 11:34:00 AM

Nice poem

Lin Lane
Date: 9/3/2024 6:21:00 PM

Thanks, Jay.

Janice Canerdy

Date: 9/2/2024 8:20:00 PM

Lovely poem, Lin. CONGRATS on your podium win in my contest. Janice

Lin Lane
Date: 9/3/2024 6:20:00 PM

Janice, thank you for considering my entry worthy of a placement on your winning list.

John Lawless

Date: 9/1/2024 3:36:00 PM

Nicely done Lin, repetitions like the riff of a card shark shuffling a marked deck......it is the "top a the mornin'" the Irish great ya with...

Lin Lane
Date: 9/1/2024 5:00:00 PM

I thank you very much, John.

Jan Allison

Date: 9/1/2024 1:28:00 PM

absolutely beautiful Lin, what a wonderful form too, i must try it - I love the impact of the repeated lines and the picture you chose is quite charming:-) hugs jan xx

Lin Lane
Date: 9/1/2024 4:59:00 PM

It’s the first I’ve written in this form and I really like it. Thanks a lot, Jan.

Daniel Caplin

Date: 9/1/2024 1:11:00 PM

Hi Lin how beautiful this is , I love it in its entirety but the two lines that I particularly loved was: "The world still sleeps at dawn's first blush" and "as sunlight's tepid breath draws near". Good luck in the contest . Danny

Lin Lane
Date: 9/1/2024 4:58:00 PM

Thanks,Danny. I think the first lines set the tone of a poem so it seems those these were good enough.

Tom Cunningham

Date: 9/1/2024 9:13:00 AM

Nothing beats that time of day when most of the world are still asleep and ideas start flowing into your mind. Tom

Lin Lane
Date: 9/1/2024 9:35:00 AM

We've compared notes on that truth. Thanks so much, Tom.