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March 3, 2025

~ Second Place ~
Contest: Just March 2025 Posted
Sponsor: Brian Strand

~ Ninth Place ~
Premiere Contest: As The Last Petal Falls
Sponsor: Sara Jama


 

I recline with my cherry tree musings… a fountain of blossoms cherub cheek complected rise and curve from the ground up into a heaven and cloud scene to spread in splendor a festoon of blooms like cumulus puffs plucked from above and placed in tufts to fluff graceful branches plush with clusters the color of a young lady's blush captured within her maiden buds before she even knew how to bloom born of Nature’s wealth she is rich with ruffled flourish steeped with dawn’s diamond dew heaped with pollen-gold pursed within petal-pouches 'til unfurled like hooped petticoats —thriving with a thrill a celebration of flowering moments alive in beauty yet only for the lifespan of but a brief thought conjured by the cosmos she wears the luxe mantle of a romance regent a spring queen amongst the green but a reign not designed to last beyond the swoon of April's pink moon ..and I the lowly grateful grass beneath her class am charmed and soothed by the light coral fall of her confetti rain when her flowers relinquish control reach into their shared soul realizing it’s time to let go falling f a l l i n g from heights of her feminine fame a shower of rosy carnival streamers a dramatic-diva's curtain call ..and I the lowly grateful grass beneath her shade am humbled by the melancholy of her fading beauty but I'm cheered to receive and wear her eye catching mantle to bear her vanilla scented love letters to the earth transforming me from the peasantry of chlorophyll-tame transforming me from the mundane to the ordained for in this moment as you gaze upon me —these plain blades of grass even I a m enchanting as the gift of the last pink petal falls

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Date: 3/15/2025 8:18:00 AM
Congratulations on this one being on the winners' list. Way to go. Thanks for sharing your thoughts with us. Sara K
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Susan Ashley
Date: 3/16/2025 8:48:00 AM
Dear Sara, thank your for your gracious visit and kind words of congrats. Your lovely thoughts are appreciated. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Date: 3/14/2025 6:47:00 PM
Breathtaking- I liked your comparisons . "for in this moment as you gaze upon me these plain blades of grass even I am enchanting as the gift of the last pink petal falls" beautiful and final end, that doesn't end.
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Date: 3/16/2025 8:47:00 AM
Dear Paige, wonderful poet, I relish your kind visit and lovely thoughts. Thank you for spending time with my poem and for letting my verse play upon your heart and imagination. I'm filled with gratitude, my dear friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Date: 3/13/2025 12:30:00 AM
classic. congratulations on your win dear poet. cheers!!!
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Date: 3/13/2025 9:14:00 AM
Dear Thriveni, your gracious visit with kind congrats is truly appreciated. Thank you, my poet friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Date: 3/10/2025 8:19:00 PM
Susan, you have the gift of words and are a beautiful writer, I love this poem and congratulation on your placement in the contest, blessings ~
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Date: 3/13/2025 9:13:00 AM
Dear Constance, I am humbled and honored by your generosity and kindness. Your words are cherished and held in my deepest gratitude. You are a beautiful writer too whose verses shine with your appreciative mindful spirit and the tender gift of empathy. Thank you, my poet friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Date: 3/9/2025 9:16:00 AM
Hello Susan,, this is truly a beautiful write, as a reader I was wishing it to be longer as I was throughly enjoying the read. Wishing you a peaceful Sunday, my friend.
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Date: 3/13/2025 9:07:00 AM
Ah Zyrool, I am touched by your kindness and beautiful spirit. I love the daffodils, I've placed them in an imaginary vase to admire as they bring a bouquet of Spring smiles to my being. Thank you, my dear poet friend.. ~Susan
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Zyrool Gifford
Date: 3/13/2025 8:08:00 AM
Hello Susan, my sincere apologies for not once but twice typing your name incorrectly on two of my comments to you. Please accept this bunch of imaginary daffodils, my friend.Stay Blessed.
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Susan Ashley
Date: 3/13/2025 7:48:00 AM
Dear Zyrool, wonderful poet, your precious thoughts touch my heart deeply. Thank you for sharing in the emotions and imagery of this piece with me. I am completely honored that you were "wishing it to be longer".. your sweet sentiment feeds my poet's soul. So happy you enjoyed my poem! Warmest wishes to you, my sweet friend.. ~Susan
Date: 3/7/2025 10:48:00 PM
Dear susan, poetic genius, perfect day to read this beautiful poem, which depicts a feminine spirit in the most eloquent manner: i love the assonance and alliterations flowing throughout this poem as well as how youv written "and I the lowly grateful grass beneath her shade am humbled by the melancholy of her fading beauty" just beautiful!!! How stunning! Your way with describing things is beyond impressive! Pleasure reading you today: happy womens day! Sending you light always
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Date: 3/13/2025 7:43:00 AM
Dear Ink, soulful poetess, I'm thrilled by your embrace of the feminine spirit of this poem. I wanted capture a sense of joy in experiencing the soft, graceful quality of this symbolic female entity, and portray a sense gratitude for her lovely presence, even as she ages and her petals fall. Thank you for sharing in the emotions and celebration of this piece with me. Your thoughts are cherished. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Date: 3/5/2025 10:29:00 PM
Hi Susan, your cherry tree in her blossom glory shines magnificent, but for a very brief period. The 'confetti rain'(oh, how I love that expression!) will soon start and she will be devoid of of all her embellishments. The grass with plain blades under her feet will be gifted with pink petal galore. Susan, your poem is so very striking with celestial images and metaphors! You think in ways no ordinary poet can think. Congratulations, sweet Susan on your win though you deserve greater placement
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Date: 3/13/2025 7:33:00 AM
Dearest Valsa, lovely poetess, I'm enchanted by the beauty of your comments and grateful to receive your precious thoughts. Indeed, I am humbled by your kindness and honored for your considerate congrats. Your heartfelt words touch my heart deeply. Thank you, my dear sweet friend, for believing in my poetry. You are an inspiration to me always. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Date: 3/4/2025 5:26:00 PM
Beautiful poem from the point of view of the grass, nice internal rhymes and alliteration, and we see the cherry tree having its day, and then, for a moment, the grass.
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Susan Ashley
Date: 3/5/2025 6:00:00 AM
Dear David, your comments are beautiful and a joy to receive. Yes even the ordinary grass was given its moment of glory. Thank you for sharing in the imagery and emotion of this poem with me. Warmest wishes my poet friend.. ~Susan
Date: 3/4/2025 7:00:00 AM
I like the personification of the cherry tree. Your poem shimmers with color and change. I like the last line, "I...am enchanting as the pink gift of the last petal falls".
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Susan Ashley
Date: 3/4/2025 9:01:00 AM
Dear Hilda, I appreciate your wonderful visit and your lovely comments. So glad to know you liked my poem and especially the last line. Your words are uplifting, my poet friend, thank you. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Date: 3/3/2025 1:14:00 PM
Such beautiful poetry, and quite a changeup from your last one. Your ability to change moods in a single day and go from firebrand to firefly is quite amazing. I barely get inspired once a month lol
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Date: 3/4/2025 8:58:00 AM
haha! Blame in on the mood swings ;) Dear Tom, actually my Eve poem was about a month or so in the making after reading news accounts from this country and from around the world on violence against women. Therefore.. lots of outrage, thoughts, verses, edits.. outrage, thoughts, verses, edits.. you get the idea.. The Petal poem I wrote pretty quickly, a day and a half for me is pretty quick lol! Usually I'm a slow-pen poet! I like your "firebrand to firefly" comparison! Thank you for your gracious comments, my poet friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Suze

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